Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, definitely. I had a bike, umm and that's the gift from my parents because I did well in my final exam, so they bought it as a reward.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes, they are quite popular especially the sharing bikes because they are easy to find and it is a cost effective way to commute in a short distance.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 84.0Gợi ý: 回答直接且信息完整,能够说明自行车的来源和获得它的原因。建议去掉口语填充词“umm”,并将“that's the gift”改为更自然的过去时表达“it was a gift”。此外,“final exam”可以根据语境改为“final exams”,使表达更自然。
Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. I had a bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my parents because I had done well in my final exams, so they bought it as a reward.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 81.0Gợi ý: 回答观点明确,也提供了共享单车受欢迎的原因。建议在“popular”后加逗号,并将“the sharing bikes”改为更自然的“bike-sharing schemes”或“shared bikes”。“cost effective”应写作“cost-effective”,“in a short distance”应改为“over short distances”或“for short trips”。可以加入具体场景,例如通勤或短途出行,使内容更具体。
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially shared bikes. They are easy to find and relatively inexpensive, so they are a convenient and cost-effective way to travel over short distances, particularly in crowded city centers.
× Yes, definitely. I had a bike, umm and that's the gift from my parents because I did well in my final exam, so they bought it as a reward.
✓ Yes, definitely. I had a bike, um, and it was a gift from my parents because I did well in my final exam, so they bought it as a reward.
句子主要是在讲童年时发生的事情,因此应使用过去时。原句中的“that's”是“that is”的缩写,属于现在时;改为“it was”与前面的过去时“had”以及后面的“bought”保持一致。建议描述过去经历时,统一检查句中的动词是否使用过去式。
× Yes, they are quite popular especially the sharing bikes because they are easy to find and it is a cost effective way to commute in a short distance.
✓ Yes, they are quite popular, especially shared bikes, because they are easy to find and they are a cost-effective way to commute over short distances.
原句中的“it”不能清楚地指代前面的复数名词“bikes”。因为主语是复数,所以应使用复数代词“they”。建议使用代词时,先确认它所指代的名词是单数还是复数,并保持数的一致。
× Yes, they are quite popular especially the sharing bikes because they are easy to find and it is a cost effective way to commute in a short distance.
✓ Yes, they are quite popular, especially shared bikes, because they are easy to find and they are a cost-effective way to commute over short distances.
“in a short distance”不是表达“短距离出行”的自然搭配。这里应使用“over short distances”或“for short distances”。另外,“distances”通常用复数表示一般性的短距离。建议记住固定搭配“travel or commute over short distances”。