Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Ответ в целом прямой и достаточно хорошо развит: вы объяснили, почему раньше не катались, и рассказали, как ваше отношение изменилось. Однако начало «So there is a story» звучит неестественно и не отвечает на вопрос напрямую; лучше сразу сказать, была ли у вас велосипед. Избегайте повторения «So» и используйте более естественные формы: «I mostly stayed at home», «my parents didn’t like it» и «I realized that I liked the feeling of freedom». Сочетание «the feeling of the freedom and the cycling» некорректно; лучше сказать «the sense of freedom I felt while cycling».

Ví dụ: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, although I didn’t use it at first. I was quite afraid of outdoor activities and usually stayed at home watching television. However, my father encouraged me to try cycling, and I soon realized that I loved the sense of freedom it gave me.

Gợi ý: Вы ясно выразили мнение, но объяснение нуждается в более естественной грамматике и точной лексике. Вместо «the policy is favouring the cost» следует сказать, что государственная политика или городское планирование ориентированы преимущественно на автомобили: «transport policies mainly prioritize cars». Вместо «bike riders» в этом контексте естественнее использовать «cyclists», а «it happens because» можно заменить на «This is mainly because». Разделите длинную вторую фразу с помощью связки «Moreover» и приведите конкретную деталь, например отсутствие безопасных велодорожек.

Ví dụ: No, I wouldn’t say that bikes are very popular in Russia. This is mainly because transport policies tend to prioritize cars, and many cities lack safe, well-maintained cycle lanes. Moreover, the cold weather in many regions makes cycling less convenient for much of the year.

× So mostly I was sitting at home and watching television and my parents were disliking it.

✓ So I mostly sat at home and watched television, and my parents disliked it.

The speaker is describing regular activities and feelings in the past. The simple past forms sat, watched, and disliked are more appropriate than the past continuous forms. The verb dislike is generally a stative verb, so disliked is preferable to were disliking in this context.

× So mostly I was sitting at home and watching television and my parents were disliking it.

✓ So I mostly sat at home and watched television, and my parents disliked it.

The adverb mostly usually comes before the main verb when it describes how often or to what extent an action happens. Therefore, I mostly sat is more natural than mostly I was sitting.

× So my father asked me to try it once and when I tried I realized that I like the feeling of the freedom and the cycling.

✓ So my father asked me to try cycling once, and when I did, I realized that I liked the feeling of freedom that cycling gave me.

The verb realized is in the past tense, so the verb in the following that-clause should normally also be in the past tense: liked, not like. This maintains consistent past-time narration.

× So my father asked me to try it once and when I tried I realized that I like the feeling of the freedom and the cycling.

✓ So my father asked me to try cycling once, and when I did, I realized that I liked the feeling of freedom that cycling gave me.

Freedom is an abstract, uncountable noun when it is mentioned generally, so it does not need the definite article the. The phrase the freedom is only appropriate when referring to a specific freedom already identified.

× So also we don't have infrastructure for bike riders.

✓ So we also do not have infrastructure for bike riders.

The adverb also normally comes after the subject and before the main verb. Therefore, we also do not have is the correct word order, rather than So also we do not have.