Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I have a back. I got a back as a birthday gift when I was 6 and that time I started to learn to ride a bike and I like ride back very much today.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes I do. I think there are more and more popular nowadays because many young people and the youth choose to ride back as exercise and a way to socialize. So back nowadays are more popular.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答基本直接,但有明显的词汇、语法和时态问题。首先应将“back”改为“bike”;谈论童年经历时使用过去时,如“had”“got”“started”,而现在仍然喜欢骑车时才使用现在时。注意固定搭配应说“learned to ride a bike”和“liked riding my bike”,不要说“like ride back”。此外,答案中“bike”重复较多,可以用“it”替代,并加入一个具体细节,使内容更自然、有效。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I got my first bike as a birthday present when I was six, and that was when I learned to ride. I really enjoyed cycling around my neighborhood, and I still ride occasionally today.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答观点明确,也给出了原因,但存在语法、词汇和重复问题。“there are more and more popular”应改为“they are becoming more and more popular”;“young people and the youth”意思重复,只保留“young people”;“ride back”应改为“ride bikes”或“cycle”。最后一句与前面的观点重复,可以改为具体结果或例子,例如城市中自行车道增多、共享单车普及。使用“because”“as a result”等连接词可以让逻辑更清晰。
Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. Bikes are becoming increasingly popular in my country because many young people use them for exercise and socializing. In addition, bike-sharing services and dedicated cycling lanes have made cycling more convenient, especially in large cities.
× Yes, I have a back.
✓ Yes, I had a bike.
问题发生在过去的童年时期,所以应该使用一般过去时“had”,而不能使用现在时“have”。另外,“back”应为“bike”,表示“自行车”。
× I got a back as a birthday gift when I was 6 and that time I started to learn to ride a bike...
✓ I got a bike as a birthday gift when I was six, and at that time I started to learn to ride a bike...
表示“在那时”时,通常使用介词“at”,构成固定表达“at that time”。同时,“six”在正式回答中通常拼写出来;“back”应为“bike”。
× I like ride back very much today.
✓ I like riding bikes very much.
动词“like”后面可以接动名词,因此应该使用“riding”,不能直接使用动词原形“ride”。表示一般性的兴趣时,用复数“bikes”更自然;“back”应为“bike”。
× I think there are more and more popular nowadays because many young people and the youth choose to ride back as exercise and a way to socialize.
✓ I think bikes are becoming more and more popular nowadays because many young people choose to ride bikes for exercise and as a way to socialize.
“there are”后面需要接名词,不能直接接形容词“popular”。这里的主语是“bikes”,所以应使用“bikes are becoming more and more popular”。此外,“for exercise”表示“为了锻炼”更自然;“the youth”与“many young people”意思重复,可以删除。
× So back nowadays are more popular.
✓ So bikes are more popular nowadays.
这里谈论的是一类交通工具,应使用复数名词“bikes”。复数主语搭配“are”;“back”应为“bike”。同时,“nowadays”放在句末更自然。