Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yeah, of course, I guess we all had a bike when we were a kid. Umm. My mom bought this bike for me because I was pretty jealous for other kids having their own bike, so I asked my mom to buy 1 for me.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Well, I do think so because I can see that eighty percent of people in my country know how to ride a bike and no matter whatever age they are at. And also we have shared bikes everywhere and I can see people with different ages riding those bikes.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答自然但有口语填充词(如“Umm”)和一些语法不一致(复数/单数)需要改进。建议: 1) 去掉多余填充词,保持句子简洁; 2) 开头用明确的主题句直接回答问题; 3) 修正语法细节(we/ I, kid/kids, number words 用词); 4) 如果需要,加入一到两句具体细节(例如你几岁得到的,第一次学会骑车的经历)并用连接词衔接。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a bike when I was seven because I felt jealous of my friends who already had one. After that, I practised every afternoon and soon learned to ride without help.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答观点明确且有数据支持,但存在夸张或不确切的表述(如“eighty percent”未经说明)和冗长表达(“no matter whatever age they are at”)。建议: 1) 使用更自然、准确的表达替代绝对化或冗余短语; 2) 用一两个具体例子或原因支撑观点(如共享单车普及、城市规划、通勤习惯); 3) 使用连接词(for example, moreover)使逻辑更清晰。
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, bike-sharing programs are widespread in cities, and many people use them for short commutes or errands, so you can see riders of all ages on the streets.
× I guess we all had a bike when we were a kid.
✓ I guess we all had bikes when we were kids.
原句中主语是复数的“we”,但后半句用了单数名词“a bike”和单数词组“a kid”,造成主谓及数的一致性错误。应把名词和代词改为复数形式以保持一致:"we" 对应 "bikes" 和 "kids"。建议多注意主语的数,句中相关名词和代词也要相应变为单数或复数。
× My mom bought this bike for me because I was pretty jealous for other kids having their own bike, so I asked my mom to buy 1 for me.
✓ My mom bought this bike for me because I was pretty jealous of other kids having their own bikes, so I asked my mom to buy one for me.
原句中有两处问题:一是介词搭配错误“jealous for”应为“jealous of”;二是数的一致性,其他孩子拥有的“bike”应为复数“bikes”;此外数字“1”在正式书面或口语中应写为“one”。根据语境使用过去时“bought/was/asked”是正确的。建议记住常用形容词与介词搭配(jealous of),并注意名词单复数一致。
× Well, I do think so because I can see that eighty percent of people in my country know how to ride a bike and no matter whatever age they are at.
✓ Well, I do think so because I can see that eighty percent of people in my country know how to ride a bike no matter what age they are.
原句“no matter whatever age they are at”的结构不够地道,多余的“whatever”与不必要的“at”应去掉,常见表达为“no matter what age they are”或“regardless of their age”。此外整体为一般现在时态,用“know/how they are” 保持一致。建议学习固定表达“no matter what” 和“regardless of”以改进表达。
× And also we have shared bikes everywhere and I can see people with different ages riding those bikes.
✓ Also, we have shared bikes everywhere, and I can see people of different ages riding those bikes.
原句“people with different ages”不如固定搭配“people of different ages”自然;此外句首不需要“And also”两者重复,选其一即可。已将句子小幅调整以符合自然表达并保留现在时。建议记住常见介词搭配如“people of different ages”,并避免重复连接词。