Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
To be honest, I used to have a bike when I was child. It was my birthday gift. If my memory served me right, it's going to be correct. However, nowadays I do not have any more because umm, most of the time I usually use the private vehicle or public transport instead because it's more convenient.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Honestly I live in bored Switzerland and Thailand. If I talk about Switzerland it it's extremely popular because the weather is so nice and the government built the bike lane so it's really it's really good and safety. However in Thailand I don't think so because it's really hot and not suitable for bike.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler phrases (e.g. "to be honest", "if my memory served me right", "umm") and correct grammar ("when I was a child", "I no longer have one"). Use one linking phrase to add reason. Keep to maximum five sentences.
Ví dụ: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child; it was a birthday present. However, I no longer have it because I usually travel by car or public transport nowadays, which is more convenient for my daily needs.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: Clarify and correct geography and phrasing, avoid redundancy and informal words like "bored". Give a clear topic sentence comparing the two countries, use linking words ("in contrast", "because") and provide specific details (e.g. infrastructure, climate). Limit to three sentences.
Ví dụ: It depends on the country. In Switzerland cycling is very popular because of good weather, extensive bike lanes and a strong cycling culture. In contrast, cycling is less common in Thailand due to the hot climate and limited cycling infrastructure in many cities.
× To be honest, I used to have a bike when I was child.
✓ To be honest, I used to have a bike when I was a child.
Missing article 'a' before the singular noun 'child'. English requires 'a' or 'the' with singular countable nouns when not using a possessive or other determiner. Use 'a child' here because you refer to a non-specific child (yourself in the past).
× If my memory served me right, it's going to be correct.
✓ If my memory serves me right, that should be correct.
Tense and modality are mixed incorrectly. 'If my memory served me right' uses past tense but refers to a present-belief condition, so use present tense 'serves'. 'It's going to be correct' is awkward; use modal verb 'should' to express probability. Also replace 'it' with 'that' to refer to the previous statement.
× However, nowadays I do not have any more because umm, most of the time I usually use the private vehicle or public transport instead because it's more convenient.
✓ However, nowadays I do not have one anymore because most of the time I usually use a private vehicle or public transport instead since they are more convenient.
Several issues: 'any more' is better as 'anymore' or 'one anymore' after 'have'—use 'one' to refer to a bike. 'the private vehicle' is incorrect article usage for general reference; use 'a private vehicle'. 'it’s more convenient' mismatches plural 'a private vehicle or public transport' so use plural pronoun 'they are' or rephrase. Also remove filler 'umm' and tighten phrasing.
× Honestly I live in bored Switzerland and Thailand.
✓ Honestly, I have lived in both Switzerland and Thailand.
'I live in bored Switzerland' is ungrammatical and uses incorrect adjective 'bored' to describe a country. Likely intended meaning is past or present experience living in both countries, so 'I have lived in both Switzerland and Thailand' is clear. Add comma after introductory adverb.
× If I talk about Switzerland it it's extremely popular because the weather is so nice and the government built the bike lane so it's really it's really good and safety.
✓ If I talk about Switzerland, biking is extremely popular because the weather is so nice and the government has built bike lanes, so it is very safe.
Multiple issues: 'it it's' is duplication; use clear subject 'biking' or 'cycling'. 'the government built the bike lane' mixes tenses—use present perfect 'has built' to indicate completed action with present relevance. 'bike lane' should be plural 'bike lanes' for general statement. 'it's really it's really good and safety' is ungrammatical; use 'very safe' (adjective) rather than 'safety' (noun).
× However in Thailand I don't think so because it's really hot and not suitable for bike.
✓ However, in Thailand I don't think so because it is really hot and not suitable for biking.
Missing comma after introductory 'However'. 'not suitable for bike' is incorrect noun form; use gerund 'biking' or 'for bicycles' (noun) and use full form 'it is' for clarity. Also ensure consistent tense and phrasing.