Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is natural and relevant, with good memory detail, but it is slightly repetitive and a little long. To improve: (1) Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question. (2) Limit supporting details to two concise points (when/how often and why it was memorable). (3) Reduce repetition (avoid saying “remember” multiple times and don’t repeat ‘bicycle(s)’ unnecessarily). (4) Use one or two linking words (for example, “because” and “so”) to make the response cohesive. Work on tightening the answer to 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., “ride” → “cycle”).

Ví dụ: Yes — I had a pink bicycle when I was a child. I cycled it almost every day after school because it was a fun way to exercise and meet my neighbourhood friends. I still remember how free and happy I felt riding it, which is why the memory is so vivid.

Gợi ý: Your answer answers the question directly and gives reasons, but it contains hesitations (‘umm’), some repetition and minor grammatical slips. To improve: (1) Give a short topic sentence, then add two concise reasons with linking words (for example, “because” and “moreover”). (2) Avoid fillers like “umm.” (3) Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “affordable” instead of “less expensive”) and avoid repeating the same idea twice (“easier to maintain” appears twice). (4) Provide a brief example or a statistic if possible to make it more specific. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them because they are affordable and cheaper to maintain than cars. Moreover, you can see bicycles parked on almost every street, especially in busy urban areas.

× I remember it so vividly because I used to ride that bicycle almost every day, especially after school, to get some exercise or to try to spend some time with my friends in the neighborhood.

✓ I remember it so vividly because I used to ride that bicycle almost every day, especially after school, to get some exercise or to spend time with my friends in the neighborhood.

The original sentence uses 'to try to spend some time' which is wordy and awkward in this past-habit context. Removing 'try to' and one 'some' makes the sentence clearer and matches the past habitual action introduced by 'used to'. Suggestion: use concise infinitive phrases after 'to' when describing habitual past activities.

× And I still remember it like as if it was yesterday, how much fun it was to ride those bicycles.

✓ And I still remember it as if it were yesterday, how much fun it was to ride that bicycle.

There are two issues: 'like as if' is redundant—use 'as if' or 'like'; 'was' for 'as if' hypothetical past should be 'were' (subjunctive) though in informal speech 'was' is common; also earlier the student referred to one bicycle, so 'those bicycles' is inconsistent. Correct to 'as if it were yesterday' and 'that bicycle' for consistency. Suggestion: keep references consistent (singular/plural) and use 'as if' + subjunctive for unreal comparisons.

× Yes, I think that bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatical but slightly wordy: 'that' is unnecessary after 'think' when stating an opinion. Removing it produces a more natural present-tense statement. Suggestion: drop optional filler words for conciseness in spoken English.

× Every few blocks or roads you will see a ton of bikes.

✓ Every few blocks or along roads you will see a lot of bikes.

'Every few blocks or roads' is unclear and 'ton of' is informal; use 'along roads' to indicate location and 'a lot of' for a neutral register. Also include a comma or rephrase for clarity. Suggestion: use 'every few blocks' or 'along roads' and choose consistent register.

× And I think it's particular because a lot of people find it easier to maintain bikes more than cars as they are also less umm, expensive and they are easier to maintain.

✓ And I think it's partly because many people find it easier to maintain bikes than cars, as bikes are also less expensive and easier to maintain.

Problems: 'particular' is incorrect word choice; 'it easier to maintain bikes more than cars' has awkward comparative structure and repeated 'maintain'; use 'partly' to express a reason and 'easier to maintain bikes than cars' for correct comparison. Also replace 'a lot of' with 'many' for formality, remove filler 'umm', and avoid repetition. Suggestion: use clear comparative structure 'easier to X than Y' and avoid repeating the same verb.