Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise, correct grammar, avoid filler sounds (umm), and use clear linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I did”), give one or two specific supporting details, and use correct tense and word forms (e.g. “jealous” not “jealousy”; “beg” not “face/get a bug”). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about six or seven, and I remember feeling very jealous of other kids who rode theirs to the park. Because of that, I begged my parents until they bought one for me, and I rode it almost every day after school.

Gợi ý: Finish your idea and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use linking words (for example, however) and give specific contrasting details. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. “shared bikes” or brand names, “scan the QR code”) and complete the comparison. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, they are popular in many cities. For example, in Shanghai and other crowded urban areas, shared bikes are very common — you can just scan a QR code to unlock one. However, in some rural regions or smaller towns bikes are less common because distances are longer and public transport is limited.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, umm, I think it was like 6 years old or seven years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; I think I was about six or seven years old.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the adjective '6 years old' to describe 'it' (the bike) instead of the speaker. Use 'I was about six or seven years old' to correctly modify the subject. Also replace 'like' with 'about' for approximate age and use a clearer structure. Suggestion: place the age phrase after 'I was' and use numerals spelled out for small numbers in formal writing.

× And at that time I was very jealousy of the kids who get a bike in the park.

✓ At that time I was very jealous of the kids who got a bike in the park.

The word 'jealousy' is a noun; the correct adjective is 'jealous'. Also tense and agreement: use past tense 'got' to match 'was'. Suggestion: use the adjective form 'jealous' and match verbs to past context.

× So I just umm, face like my parents to get a bug for me.

✓ So I just kept asking my parents to get a bike for me.

The original uses 'face like' and 'bug' which are incorrect words/pronouns in context. 'Face' is wrong verb and 'bug' is wrong noun; likely meant 'kept asking' and 'bike'. Also 'to get a bike for me' is the correct infinitive structure. Suggestion: use clear verbs ('ask', 'keep asking') and correct object nouns.

× I think it depends for example in Shanghai and some crowded and modern cities, the bicycles are very popular and we also have some like the shell bikes.

✓ I think it depends. For example, in Shanghai and some crowded, modern cities, bicycles are very popular and we also have bike-sharing services like Shell bikes.

Problems: missing punctuation and connector, awkward preposition use. 'Depends' needs 'on' or a pause; better as 'depends.' Also 'crowded and modern cities' is fine but needs a comma, and 'the bicycles' unnecessary article. 'Shell bikes' unclear — likely 'bike-sharing services' or a brand. Suggestion: add punctuation, use 'in' correctly, remove unnecessary 'the', and clarify 'shell bikes' as 'bike-sharing services'.

× You just can scale the QR code to get them right.

✓ You can simply scan the QR code to get one.

'Scale' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'scan'. Word order 'just can' is unnatural in English; use 'can simply' or 'simply can'. 'Get them' is vague; use 'get one' or 'rent one'. Suggestion: use the correct verb 'scan', natural adverb placement, and clear object.

× But in some like big countries countries, for example,

✓ But in some larger countries, for example, ...

Redundant word 'countries' repeated and awkward phrasing 'some like big countries'. Use 'larger countries' or 'some big countries'. Also the sentence is incomplete and needs continuation. Suggestion: remove repetition and complete the sentence with the contrasting idea.