Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
This I used to have a small four wheeled bike when I was a child it was a gift from my grandmother and I really enjoy riding that bike in my neighbourhood with my friends
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country. They are convenient for short trips and help solve the last kilometers problem. And many friends of mine prefer cycling because it's cheap and good exhaust.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 句子结构需要更清晰,注意时态和连贯性;避免冗长的单句,使用主题句+1-2个补充细节,加入连接词并改正小错误(如four-wheeled, enjoyed),可以提供更具体的细节(例如骑行频率、场景或感受)。
Ví dụ: Yes. I had a small four-wheeled bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my grandmother, and I used to ride it around my neighbourhood several times a week with my friends because we enjoyed racing each other.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 表达要更准确、用词要地道;避免直译式短语(如"last kilometers problem"可说"the last-mile problem"),修正不当词汇("good exhaust"不合适,应说"environmentally friendly"或"produce no emissions"). 同时用连接词组织观点并给出具体例子或数据提升说服力。
Ví dụ: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. They are ideal for short journeys and often solve the last-mile problem for commuters. For example, many people cycle from their homes to the nearest bus or metro station because cycling is cheap and environmentally friendly.
× This I used to have a small four wheeled bike when I was a child it was a gift from my grandmother and I really enjoy riding that bike in my neighbourhood with my friends
✓ I used to have a small four-wheeled bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my grandmother, and I really enjoyed riding that bike in my neighbourhood with my friends.
错误类型:句子结构和时态混用。原句把多个独立句连在一起,缺少标点使句子冗长且不清晰;另外谈及过去的经历应使用过去时,所以“enjoy”应为“enjoyed”。建议:使用句号或逗号分开独立子句,并保持时态一致(描述过去经历时全部用过去时)。注意复合形容词“four-wheeled”用连字符。
× Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country. They are convenient for short trips and help solve the last kilometers problem. And many friends of mine prefer cycling because it's cheap and good exhaust.
✓ Yes, I think bicycles are popular in my country. They are convenient for short trips and help solve the last-kilometre problem. Many of my friends prefer cycling because it's cheap and produces little exhaust.
错误类型:形容词/短语用法不当和词序问题。原句“last kilometers problem”表达不自然,应为“last-kilometre problem”或“last-mile problem”(英式用法);“good exhaust”不合适,应该说明排放少或环境友好,如“produces little exhaust”。此外不要以“And”开始新句,直接连接更自然。建议:使用常见固定搭配(last-kilometre/last-mile),用恰当表达描述排放(little/no exhaust/low emissions)。