Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it's slightly long and repetitive. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Use a linking word to connect ideas and avoid redundancy (e.g., don’t repeat 'bike' and 'bicycle'). Pay attention to natural phrasing and sentence boundaries.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a bicycle for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it every afternoon and sometimes in the evenings after homework. Because we lived near a park, I often practiced tricks with my friends there.

Gợi ý: Your response answers the question directly and gives a reason, but the phrasing is slightly awkward and wordy. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then use a linking word (e.g., because, since, as) to give two specific reasons or an example. Try to avoid absolute negative words like 'very bad option' — instead explain why (e.g., traffic, distance, infrastructure).

Ví dụ: Not really. Bicycles aren’t common for commuting in Indonesia because cities like Jakarta have heavy traffic and long distances, so people prefer motorbikes or cars. For example, there are few dedicated bike lanes, which makes cycling unsafe for daily travel.

× Yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child so the bicycle itself was given from my parents after my seventh birthday and I used to ride it every afternoon or in the evening

✓ Yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child. The bicycle was given to me by my parents after my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it every afternoon or in the evening.

Run-on sentence and incorrect passive preposition: 'given from my parents' is incorrect; use 'given to me by my parents'. Also the original combines multiple clauses without proper punctuation. Split into two sentences and add commas for clarity. Maintain past tense ('had', 'was given', 'used to ride'). Suggestion: use 'given to me by' for passive transfers and separate independent clauses with a period or semicolon.

× To be fair, not really because the bicycle is a very bad option for commuting, especially in the capital city of Indonesia, which is Jakarta, it is more convenient to ride a motorbike or even a car to travel

✓ To be fair, not really, because bicycles are a very poor option for commuting, especially in the capital city of Indonesia, Jakarta. It is more convenient to ride a motorbike or even a car to travel.

Article and singular/plural issues: 'the bicycle' is unnatural when speaking generally; use plural 'bicycles' or 'a bicycle' depending on meaning. Also 'a very bad option' is better expressed as 'a very poor option'. The original is a run-on sentence; split into two sentences and remove the unnecessary clause marker 'which is'. Maintain present tense for general statements. Suggestion: use plural for generalizations ('bicycles') and avoid long comma splices by using separate sentences.