Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장 구조와 내용이 불명확하고 많은 오류가 있습니다. 우선 첫 문장은 간단히 긍정을 표현하되 중복을 피하세요. ‘dad and she’처럼 주어가 일치하지 않고, ‘like’의 과도한 사용과 ‘skilled writer’ 같은 잘못된 단어 선택(아마 ‘rider’를 의도)을 고쳐야 합니다. 1) 주어와 대명사 일치 확인, 2) 불필요한 filler('like') 줄이기, 3) 어휘 정확성(‘rider’), 4) 문장 수는 2-3문장으로 간결히 구성하세요. 예시 문장은 자연스러운 토픽 문장 + 연결어구 + 구체적 활동으로 구성합니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My father taught me how to ride, and he showed me techniques to stay balanced and confident. I practiced every day after school, so within a few months I became a skilled rider.

Gợi ý: 답변이 모호하고 의미 전달이 잘 되지 않습니다. ‘share and land daily like dawling’ 등 표현이 의미 불명이며 중복(‘everyone everyone’)을 피해야 합니다. 명확한 이유와 구체적 예시를 덧붙여 설득력을 높이세요. 1) 간단한 주제문으로 시작, 2) 이유(교통, 레저, 건강 등)를 1-2개 제시, 3) 연결어(‘because’, ‘for example’)로 문장 이어가기, 4) 불필요한 반복 삭제.

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to get around. For example, many people use bikes for short commutes and shopping, and there are also many dedicated bike lanes in cities.

× I learned to ride a bike from my dad and she taught me techniques so I could like confidently like an athlete.

✓ I learned to ride a bike from my dad and he taught me techniques so I could ride confidently like an athlete.

Pronoun error: 'she' refers to a female but 'my dad' is male, so use 'he'. Also, unnecessary filler 'like' is repeated and disrupts fluency; remove extra 'like' and include the verb 'ride' after 'could' to complete the meaning. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents and avoid filler words.

× I learned to ride a bike from my dad and she taught me techniques so I could like confidently like an athlete.

✓ I learned to ride a bike from my dad and he taught me techniques so I could ride confidently like an athlete.

Adverb placement and redundancy: 'confidently' correctly modifies the verb 'ride' and should come after it; the repeated 'like' is unnecessary. Suggestion: place adverbs near the verbs they modify and remove redundant words.

× I practiced every day after school, so I soon became a skilled writer.

✓ I practiced every day after school, so I soon became a skilled rider.

Word choice/meaning error: 'writer' is semantically incorrect in the context of riding a bike; likely intended word is 'rider'. Suggestion: choose words that match the context and meaning.

× Yes, of course in my country we can share and land daily like dawling and do visit division.

✓ Yes, of course. In my country, we often use bikes for daily commuting and leisure, and people visit different places by bike.

Unclear and incorrect phrasing: original sentence contains nonsensical words ('dawling', 'division') and poor sentence boundaries. Suggestion: split into clear sentences, use accurate vocabulary ('daily commuting', 'leisure', 'visit different places'), and include commas for clarity.

× So everyone everyone can join to ride a bike.

✓ So everyone can join in riding a bike.

Redundancy and incorrect verb pattern: repeated 'everyone' is unnecessary. The verb pattern 'join to ride' is incorrect; use 'join in' + gerund or 'join' + object. Suggestion: remove repetition and use 'join in riding' or 'join to ride' with corrected structure; here 'join in riding' is natural.

× It is really popular.

✓ Bicycling is really popular.

Vague subject: 'It' is ambiguous. Clarifying the subject as 'Bicycling' or 'Riding bikes' improves coherence and agreement. Suggestion: use a clear noun subject that matches the topic.