Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure: give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fragments and filler (uh). For example, say your age correctly (‘when I was ten’) and combine short fragments into full sentences: explain why the bike was special or how you used it. Keep answer to up to 5 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike when I was ten. My parents gave it to me as a birthday present, and I used it to ride to school and play with friends every afternoon. I remember feeling very proud because it was my first big gift, and it helped me become more independent.

Gợi ý: Focus on clarity, correct word choice and linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then support with specific reasons and examples. Replace unclear words (‘mute’, ‘conute’) with correct terms (e.g., ‘common’, ‘commute’). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘therefore’ and avoid repeating phrases.

Ví dụ: Yes, bicycles are still very popular in China because not everyone can afford a car. For many people, bikes are a convenient and cheap way to commute to work or school, and in many cities there are bike lanes and shared bike services that make cycling practical.

× I had a bike when I was, uh, ten years child.

✓ I had a bike when I was ten years old.

The phrase 'ten years child' is ungrammatical. Use the standard age expression 'ten years old' or 'ten' after 'was'. This fixes word order and missing 'old'. Suggestion: say 'when I was ten' or 'when I was ten years old.'

× Then my birthday gift.

✓ It was a birthday present.

This fragment lacks a verb and subject, making it a sentence without a verb (sentence structure error). Also 'gift' is acceptable but 'present' is more natural here. Combine with the previous sentence or make a complete sentence: 'It was a birthday present.'

× Then my dad sent it to me.

✓ My dad gave it to me.

The verb 'sent' suggests mailing; for giving a physical gift in person, use 'gave'. This corrects the inappropriate verb choice and prepositional implication. Alternatively, if it was mailed, keep 'sent it to me.'

× Of course, you know, in China not every person owns his car as the transportation so the bicycle is the is the daily mute daily conute transportation for most of the people.

✓ Of course. In China, not everyone owns a car, so the bicycle is the daily or common means of transportation for most people.

This sentence has multiple problems: word choice ('person' -> 'everyone'), incorrect possessive 'his car' -> gender-neutral 'a car', redundancy and garbled words ('is the is the', 'mute', 'conute'), and awkward phrasing. Correcting fixes sentence structure, word choice, and clarity. Suggestions: use commas to separate clauses, avoid redundant words, and use 'means of transportation' or 'mode of transport.'