Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장 구조와 시제, 그리고 중복을 정리해야 합니다. 먼저 현재 시제와 과거 시제를 혼용하지 말고 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거형을 사용하세요(예: I had a bike / I used to ride my bike). 불필요한 반복(when I was a child, when I was a elementary student)과 중복 발언( I I )을 제거하고 한두 문장으로 명확히 답하세요. 또한 주제를 소개하는 토픽 문장(예: I had a bike when I was a child.)을 말한 뒤, 왜 기억에 남았는지 또는 어떤 활동을 했는지 구체적 세부사항(몇 살 때부터, 얼마나 자주, 누구와 함께)을 연결어(For example, I often..., so I...)로 부가하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ví dụ: I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to school every day from age eight, and I often taught my younger cousins how to ride because I was quite confident on two wheels.

Gợi ý: 의견 제시는 잘 했지만 이유 설명이 모호하고 문장이 반복됩니다. 먼저 간결한 주제 문장으로 시작하세요(예: Not really, cars are more popular.). 그 다음 이유를 2개 정도 구체적으로 제시하고 연결어를 사용하세요(For example / Firstly / Secondly). 또한 불완전한 문장이나 어휘 오류(“by store” 등)를 고쳐 구체적으로 표현하세요(e.g., bike lanes, long distances, weather).

Ví dụ: Not really. Cars are more popular in my country because cities are spread out and there are few bike lanes. For example, many people travel long distances to work and prefer cars for comfort and convenience.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use the past tense 'had' instead of the present tense 'have'. Use past tense for actions or possessions that occurred in the past. Suggestion: Replace present simple with past simple when referring to past time frames.

× When I was a child, when I was a elementary student, I used to ride the bike to go to school and teaches everyone how to ride a bike because I I was great at riding a bike.

✓ When I was a child, when I was an elementary student, I used to ride a bike to school and taught everyone how to ride because I was great at it.

Multiple errors: 'a elementary' should be 'an elementary' (article before vowel sound). 'the bike' is unnecessary general article; use 'a bike' for non-specific. 'to go to school' is wordy; 'to school' is idiomatic. 'teaches' is present tense and incorrect with 'used to' and past context; use past tense 'taught'. Duplicate 'I I' should be a single 'I'. Repetition 'riding a bike' can be shortened to 'it'. Suggestion: Use 'an' before vowel sounds, use past tense consistently for past habits, and avoid unnecessary definite articles for non-specific nouns.

× Not really, I think bikes are not popular in my country, instead cars are more popular in my country.

✓ Not really. I think bikes are not very popular in my country; instead, cars are more popular.

Run-on and repetition: original repeats 'in my country' and joins clauses with commas incorrectly. Use a period or semicolon to separate independent clauses and avoid redundant phrases. Add 'very' to soften 'not popular' if appropriate. Suggestion: Split long sentences into clear clauses and avoid repeating the same phrase.

× The reason that bikes are not popular I think in my perspective we don't have much by store and it's.

✓ I think the reason bikes are not popular is that we don't have many bicycle stores and facilities.

Several issues: awkward word order ('The reason that... I think in my perspective' is redundant). 'by store' is incorrect; likely 'bike store'. 'we don't have much by store' mixes countable/uncountable; use 'many' with countable 'stores'. Sentence also ends abruptly 'and it's.' Rephrase for clarity and correct quantifier usage. Suggestion: State opinion succinctly: 'I think the reason is that...' then use 'many' with plural countable nouns and complete the sentence.