Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words (uh, um). Use linking words to connect ideas (because, so, therefore).

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike when I was about eight because my father worked hard to provide for the family. It was my main way of getting to friends’ houses and it helped me feel independent.

Gợi ý: Give a direct opinion with clear reasons and one specific example. Avoid vague phrases (‘from my notion’) and long hesitations. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and correct comparisons. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars or public transport. For example, many families own at least one car, so cycling is mostly for leisure rather than daily commuting.

× Yes, of course I had the bike when I was a child because my dad worked very hard for me and for my other family members because he wanted us to have everything and that's why, uh, he, uh, did that.

✓ Yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child because my dad worked very hard for me and for other family members because he wanted us to have everything, so he did that.

The sentence uses past tense appropriately but contains article and redundancy issues. Replace 'the bike' with 'a bike' because the speaker is introducing possession generally, not a previously specified bike (article error, ID 22). Remove 'my' before 'other family members' because 'other family members' already implies possession (incorrect pronoun/determiner use, ID 12). Also simplify the repeated 'because' clauses to improve sentence structure (sentence structure error, ID 26). Suggestions: use 'a' for nonspecific nouns, avoid redundant possessives, and combine causal clauses with 'so' for clarity.

× From my notion, bikes are not very popular and famous in my country because umm, people in my country prefer to uh, walk or uh, take a bus or uh, the majority of uh, my society uh, have their own cars, uh, compared to Germany, Armenia, uh, is not.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are not very popular in my country because people prefer to walk or take a bus, and the majority of society have their own cars; compared to Germany, Armenia is not.

Multiple issues: 'From my notion' is unnatural; use 'In my opinion' (word choice, ID 13). 'Popular and famous' is redundant; use 'popular' only (word choice, ID 13). The clause 'the majority of my society have' has subject-verb agreement concerns and wording: 'the majority of society has' or 'most people have' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27 and singular/plural issue, ID 1). The final fragment 'compared to Germany, Armenia, uh, is not' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'compared to Germany, Armenia is not' though the idea remains awkward—better: 'Bikes are less common in Armenia than in Germany.' Suggestions: use natural phrases ('In my opinion'), avoid redundancy, ensure subject and verb agree ('majority of society has' or 'most people have'), and complete comparisons clearly.