Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct grammar (e.g., 'I envied' not 'I envy'), and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word if you add a reason.

Ví dụ: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I always wanted one because I envied other children who rode together in the park, which looked fun and social. For example, they would race down the hill near my house every weekend, and I wished I could join them.

Gợi ý: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid vague words like 'they seem fun', provide a specific reason or example, and use linking words to connect ideas. Use plural agreement and correct phrasing (e.g., 'that's why many people buy them').

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. I often see children and adults cycling in parks and on bike lanes, and many families buy bikes for short trips and exercise. For instance, local markets often have bike racks full of bicycles on weekends, which shows how common cycling is.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was younger, but I always wanted one because I envy a lot of kids riding their bikes and it seems fun.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was younger, but I always wanted one because I envied a lot of kids riding their bikes and it seemed fun.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The context is about childhood (past), so verbs should be past tense. 'Envy' should be past 'envied'. 'It seems fun' should be past 'it seemed fun' to match the time frame. Use consistent tense (past) when describing past situations. Suggestion: keep verbs describing childhood in past tense (didn't have, wanted, envied, seemed).

× I always wanted to ride bikes along with them.

✓ I always wanted to ride a bike with them.

The original uses plural 'bikes' and 'ride bikes' which is not wrong by itself, but 'a bike' is more natural when referring to oneself wanting one bike. 'Along with them' is awkward; 'with them' is the correct and natural prepositional phrase. Also ensure singular/plural consistency with 'a bike'. Suggestion: use 'ride a bike with them' for natural phrasing and clear reference.

× Yes, I do think they're popular in my country because I've seen a lot of kids roaming around with their bikes and they seem fun.

✓ Yes, I think they're popular in my country because I've seen a lot of kids roaming around with their bikes and it seems fun.

'I do think' is acceptable but unnecessary; 'I think' is more natural. More importantly, 'they seem fun' incorrectly refers to 'kids' with 'fun'—people are described as 'having fun' or activities as 'fun'. Here the intended subject is 'riding bikes' or 'the bikes' being fun. Changing to 'it seems fun' or better 'they look like they're having fun' clarifies meaning. Maintain tense consistency: 'I've seen' (present perfect) is fine, but follow with matching observation phrasing. Suggestion: use 'I think' and clarify who/what is 'fun', e.g., 'and they look like they're having fun'.

× That's why they're buying it.

✓ That's why they're buying them.

The pronoun 'it' (singular) does not match the plural noun 'bikes' implied earlier. If referring to bikes, use 'them' to agree in number: 'they're buying them'. If referring to 'a bike' singular, rephrase earlier sentence accordingly. Ensure pronoun number matches its antecedent. Suggestion: use matching plural pronoun 'them' for 'bikes', or make singular consistent throughout (a bike ... it).