Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course, and I like riding my bike around the park.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
I don't think so because my country is in China, Wuhan, the city is so big. So if you ride a bike for walking maybe.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 你的回答简洁明了,但缺乏细节和连贯性。提高分数的方法:1) 给出一个主题句后,用1–2个支持细节(例如骑车的频率、与谁一起、一次难忘的经历或学会骑车的年龄)来丰富内容;2) 使用连接词(例如“usually”、“often”或“when I was...”,以及“because”或“so”)使句子更流畅;3) 注意时态一致,讲述过去经历时多用过去时。举例说明时控制在最多5句内。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I often rode my bike around the park near my home when I was a child, usually in the afternoons with my friends. I learned to ride when I was about six, and I remember feeling proud the first time I managed to cycle without help. Riding was a fun way to exercise and spend time outdoors.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 你的回答表达了观点但结构混乱、用词和语法不准确,且细节不足。改进建议:1) 先直接给出观点(Yes/No)和简短原因;2) 使用清晰的连接词(for example, however, because)并提供具体细节(比如交通拥堵、地铁便捷或共享单车的情况);3) 注意句子完整性和语法(例如不要把“for walking”与“ride a bike”混用),并尽量提供1–2个具体例子支持观点。
Ví dụ: I don't think bikes are very popular in my city. Wuhan is large and many people prefer the subway or buses because they are faster for long distances. However, bikes and shared e-bikes are still common for short trips within neighborhoods or to reach a nearby park.
× Yes, of course, and I like riding my bike around the park.
✓ Yes, of course, and I liked riding my bike around the park.
原句中考官在问的是“Did you have a bike when you were a child?”(过去时),学生应使用过去时描述童年经历。原句用现在时“like”与提问的过去时间不一致。建议将动词改为过去式“liked”,以保持时态一致。
× I don't think so because my country is in China, Wuhan, the city is so big. So if you ride a bike for walking maybe.
✓ I don't think so because I am from Wuhan, China — the city is so big that people usually don't ride bikes for getting around.
原句存在多处问题:1) 地名和国家顺序及表达不自然,应写成“I am from Wuhan, China”;2) 原句时态与语境(一般事实)可用一般现在时;3) “ride a bike for walking” 不合逻辑,意思混乱,应改为表示“骑车出行/getting around”;4) 句子衔接与结构混乱,需重组为连贯句子。建议改为“I am from Wuhan, China — the city is so big that people usually don't ride bikes for getting around.”以表达“我来自中国武汉,城市太大,人们通常不骑车出行”。