Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clear and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct tense and pronoun use, and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting details (who gave it, when, a short memory) linked logically. Watch verb forms (e.g., "taught me to ride it" not "write it") and avoid filler words.

Ví dụ: Yes. My father gave me a bicycle when I was in the second grade. He taught me how to ride it in the park near our house, and I remember my classmates were amazed the first time I managed to cycle without help.

Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons. Avoid double negatives and hesitations. Use linking words (however, because, for example) to organize ideas and use precise vocabulary (motorbikes, public transport). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, they were once very popular, but their use has declined recently. This is mainly because more people now own cars or motorbikes and cities have improved public transport, so fewer people choose to ride bicycles.

× Yeah, yeah, I had a bike, so my father gave it to me when I was in elementary school.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike; my father gave it to me when I was in elementary school.

The original sentence repeats 'yeah' and uses a comma splice between two independent clauses. This is primarily a sentence structure and past tense context; past tense verbs 'had' and 'gave' are correct. Suggest removing the duplicate interjection and connect clauses properly with a semicolon or conjunction to improve clarity and correctness.

× Maybe I was in the second grade and is the one who also taught me how to write it.

✓ Maybe I was in the second grade, and he was the one who also taught me how to ride it.

Problems: subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference. 'Is the one' uses present tense and incorrect verb form for past context; 'is' should be past 'was' and 'is' mismatches the subject. Also 'who' refers to father ('he'), and 'write it' is likely the wrong verb for a bike; 'ride' fits meaning. Correct by using past tense 'was' and explicit pronoun 'he.' This addresses present/past tense misuse and incorrect verb choice.

× And my classmates were really amazed when they saw me writing it.

✓ My classmates were really amazed when they saw me riding it.

The phrase 'saw me writing it' is incorrect because 'writing' does not match the action of using a bike; the correct participle is 'riding.' The past tense 'were' and 'saw' are appropriate. This fixes the incorrect present participle and ensures verb-object agreement with the context.

× Yeah, I think bikes used to, uh, very, very popular in my country, but it is not no longer popular as it was before because umm, many people nowadays, umm, prefer to use cars in different transportations like motors rather than riding a bicycle.

✓ I think bikes used to be very popular in my country, but they are no longer as popular as they were before because many people nowadays prefer to use cars or motorcycles rather than ride bicycles.

Multiple issues: missing 'be' after 'used to' (correct: 'used to be'), double negative 'not no longer' should be 'no longer,' incorrect pronoun 'it' for plural 'bikes' (use 'they'), awkward phrase 'different transportations like motors' should be 'cars or motorcycles,' and verb form 'riding a bicycle' should be parallel 'ride bicycles.' Also tense consistency: 'used to be' (past habit) and 'are no longer' (present state). This correction fixes verb omission, pronoun number agreement, double negative, word choice, and improves parallel structure.