Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cevap daha doğru zaman kullanımı, dilbilgisi ve akıcılık açısından iyileştirilmeli. Geçmişteki bir deneyimi anlatırken simple past (I had) kullanılmalı; gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu sözcükleri (uh) azaltılmalı. Ayrıca kısa, net bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp bir veya iki destekleyici detay verin. Örnek: önce net bir cümle (I had a bike.), sonra görünüşü ve bir anı ekleyin. Kaba bir çerçeve: 1) Topic sentence (1 cümle), 2) Appearance (1 cümle), 3) Brief memory or feeling (1 cümle).

Ví dụ: I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink with glitter, and I loved riding it to the park. I remember racing my friends on summer afternoons, which made me very happy.

Gợi ý: Cümlenin akışını ve dilbilgisini düzeltmek gerekiyor: gereksiz tekrarlar ('I think' iki kez) ve yanlış çoğul/iyelik kullanımları (child's, have has) var. Ayrıca ifadenin daha spesifik ve tutarlı örneklerle desteklenmesi gerekiyor (ör. neden popüler değil, hangi alternatifleri kullanıyorlar). Bağlaçlar (however, because, nowadays) kullanarak mantıksal bağlantı kurun. Örnek yapı: 1) Kısa cevap (Not really.), 2) Geçmiş ve şimdiki durum karşılaştırması (When I was a child... Nowadays...), 3) Sebep belirtme (because...).

Ví dụ: Not really. When I was a child bikes were common—almost every kid had one. Nowadays fewer children ride bikes because many prefer electric scooters and parents worry about traffic. As a result, cycling is less popular among young people.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and also it's was pink with uh, glitter on it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was pink with glitter on it.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' for possession in the past. Also 'it's was' is incorrect: use 'it was'. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant comma. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for events that happened in childhood.

× Not really. I think when I was a child I think it's more popular because every child's have has a bike.

✓ Not really. I think when I was a child bikes were more popular because every child had a bike.

There are multiple errors: 'it's more popular' incorrectly uses contraction 'it's' and present tense; refer to plural 'bikes' and past time so use 'were'. 'every child's have has a bike' mixes possessive and verb forms. Use 'every child had a bike' for correct subject-verb agreement and past tense. Also avoid repeating 'I think' twice.

× But right now I think child's don't like bikes.

✓ But right now I think children don't like bikes.

Use plural 'children' instead of the incorrect singular possessive 'child's'. 'Don't' pairs with plural subject 'children'. Ensure correct noun form for the current general statement.

× They use the electrical sculptures.

✓ They use electric scooters.

The original phrase is incorrect word choice: 'electrical sculptures' is meaningless here. The intended meaning is likely 'electric scooters'. 'Electric' is the correct adjective form and 'scooters' is the correct noun. Use 'electric scooters' to convey the intended idea.