Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitations and repetitions, make a clear topic sentence then add one or two concise supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence (for example: 'because' or 'so'). Keep length under five sentences and avoid filler words like 'umm' and repeated pronouns.

Ví dụ: Yes. I had a red bike when I was five because my father was a bicycle mechanic and he built one for me from a second-hand frame. I remember riding it around our neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me become more confident and independent.

Gợi ý: Provide a direct topic sentence, then give specific reasons and a brief comparison using linking words. Remove fillers and complete your final thought. Aim for clear, grammatically correct sentences and concrete examples (e.g., affordability, traffic conditions).

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are common, but motorbikes are the most popular form of transport in my country because they are affordable and can weave through heavy traffic. For example, in the capital many people prefer motorbikes for daily commuting since parking and fuel costs for cars are higher.

× I guess when I was five years old, I, I think, uh, my dad who worked as a bicycle mechanic back then, he umm, assembled all these, uh, second hand bikes and he, he assembled, he, he made one for myself.

✓ I guess when I was five years old my dad, who worked as a bicycle mechanic back then, assembled second-hand bikes and he made one for me.

The sentence uses redundant pronouns (he) and the reflexive pronoun 'myself' incorrectly. Use 'me' as the direct object of 'made'. Remove repeated filler words and extra subject 'he' after the relative clause to make the sentence grammatical and concise. Also hyphenate 'second-hand'.

× I still remember that it was red.

✓ I still remember that it was red.

No grammatical error needing correction according to the provided list; sentence is correct. (Included to show it's fine.)

× Yes, obviously umm but umm the motorbikes are the most umm popular means of transport in my country because it's affordable and you know it's really crowded in big cities especially like the capital.

✓ Yes, obviously, but motorbikes are the most popular means of transport in my country because they are affordable and the cities, especially the capital, are really crowded.

The original sentence has wordiness and awkward structure. 'Motorbikes are the most popular means' should not have the definite article 'the' before 'motorbikes' and 'it's affordable' incorrectly uses singular pronoun for plural subject 'motorbikes' — change to 'they are affordable' (subject-pronoun agreement). Also reorder 'the cities... are really crowded' for clarity and remove filler words.

× So umm site like commuting by cars are.

✓ So, for example, commuting by car is common.

The original fragment 'site like commuting by cars are' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with a clear structure: 'for example' instead of 'site like', use 'commuting by car' (uncountable phrasing) and a complete predicate 'is common'. Ensure subject-verb agreement ('commuting' singular gerund takes singular verb 'is').