Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Вы говорите естественно и даёте личную деталь, что хорошо. Чтобы повысить оценку, сократите наполнительные слова (uh, yeah) и избегайте повторов (I remember ... I remember). Начните с чёткой темы, затем добавьте одну-две конкретные детали (напр., цвет велосипеда, где вы катались, кто учил вас). Держите ответ не более 3–4 предложений, используйте связки для плавности.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bright red bike when I was about four, and I learned to ride it in our neighborhood park. I was thrilled because I could finally ride to my friends’ houses on my own, and I practiced almost every day until I felt confident.

Gợi ý: Ответ содержит понятную идею, но страдает от неуверенности (uh) и слова прерывания, а также от неточного оформления мыслей. Для улучшения: начните с прямого утверждения, затем приведите 2 конкретные причины, используя связки (for example, because, moreover). Избегайте повторов и исправляйте произношение слов. Ограничьтесь 2–3 предложениями чёткой структуры.

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many young people prefer cycling because it is convenient and cheap, and moreover it helps avoid traffic during rush hour.

× It was maybe when I was around 5 or 4 years old.

✓ It was maybe when I was around 4 or 5 years old.

The order of numbers should be logical (small to large) and using 'maybe' with 'was' is acceptable; this corrects style rather than strict grammar: place numbers in increasing order for clarity. Suggestion: say 'when I was about four or five years old.'

× I remember that I was just over the moon about this new toy that I had.

✓ I remember that I was just over the moon about that new toy I had.

The original is understandable but wordy. Rearranging 'that new toy I had' improves natural sentence flow. Suggestion: use 'about that new toy I had' or simply 'about that new bike.'

× I think bikes present one of the safest, uh, ways to travel around the city and they are actually preferred, uh, by the younger generation because of their convenience, uh, afford affordablenab.

✓ I think bikes are one of the safest ways to travel around the city, and they are actually preferred by the younger generation because of their convenience and affordability.

Multiple issues: 'present' is wrongly used — use 'are' to link subject and complement. 'Preferred by' is correct but redundant fillers removed. The mangled word 'afford affordablenab' should be 'affordability' (a noun) or 'affordable' (adjective). Here 'convenience and affordability' is natural. Suggestion: say 'bikes are one of the safest ways...' and use 'affordability' for the noun form.