Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural, concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and repetition; use correct past forms and simple vocabulary you can control.

Ví dụ: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child, but I really wanted one. For example, I used to dream about a small blue bike with a basket, because I liked riding to my friend’s house; however, my parents were worried about my safety, so they never bought one.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words. Correct grammar (plural forms, articles, pronouns) and more precise vocabulary will help. Avoid vague phrases and repetition.

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. In particular, they are common among boys and children because they are inexpensive and easy to find; by contrast, girls often have fewer options due to cultural attitudes and less availability of suitable models.

× Uh, no, I hadn't a bike when I was a child, but I wish I had one.

✓ Uh, no, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I wish I had one.

The student used 'hadn't' (had not) which is the past perfect/negative form of 'have' used without a context requiring past perfect. The simple past negative 'didn't have' is the correct form to state possession in the past. Use 'didn't have' for negating simple past; keep 'wish I had one' as is because 'wish' + past expresses a present unreal desire.

× Umm, I dreamed uh, umm, pout or give me a Pike, uh, uh, blue, one or half color blue with baskets, uh, But uh, my mother and the father are afraid of me.

✓ Umm, I dreamed that someone would give me a bike, a blue one or a light-blue one with a basket, but my mother and father were afraid for me.

The original is jumbled and contains wrong words and structure. 'Dreamed' + that + clause expresses what was dreamed. 'Pout or give me a Pike' is incorrect words; replace with 'someone would give me a bike'. Use 'a blue one' or 'a light-blue one' for color. 'With baskets' should be singular 'a basket' for one bike. 'My mother and the father are afraid of me' is incorrect: use 'my mother and father were afraid for me' to express concern in the past. Also use past tense 'were' to match 'dreamed' and childhood timeframe.

× Yes, I think bike are quite popular in my country, but especially for boy, for children boy she was cheap and available for many, many people, but for girls it's some difficult.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for boys and children because they are cheap and widely available, but for girls it's more difficult.

'Bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match 'are'. 'Boy' and 'children boy' are incorrect; use 'boys and children'. 'She was cheap' incorrectly uses 'she' and past tense; use 'they are cheap' to refer to bikes generally. 'Available for many, many people' is better as 'widely available'. 'It's some difficult' is ungrammatical; use 'it's more difficult' to compare and sound natural.