Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변은 직접적이고 이해하기 쉬우나, 불필요한 중간의 ‘umm’ 같은 말버릇을 줄이고 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하면 점수가 오릅니다. 구체적인 세부사항(예: 자전거의 색, 어디에서 탔는지, 누구와 자주 탔는지)을 추가하고, 문장 연결을 위해 접속사나 시제 표현을 활용하세요. 또한 길이는 2~3문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike when I was in elementary school. My dad bought it for me and taught me how to ride, and I often rode it around the neighborhood with my friends.

Gợi ý: 의견은 제시했으나 문법과 문장구조가 불분명하고 반복되는 ‘umm’이 많아 전달력이 떨어집니다. 시제와 주어-동사 일치를 바로잡고, 이유와 변화 시점을 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(For a while, however, recently)를 사용해 흐름을 명확히 하세요. 예: 과거와 현재의 차이, 이유(인프라 개선, 환경 의식 증가 등)를 하나 또는 두 가지로 구체화하세요.

Ví dụ: Bikes were very popular among children when I was young, but their popularity declined for a while. However, in recent years they have become popular again because cities improved bike lanes and more people care about healthy, eco-friendly transport.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, umm, in elementary school. My dad bought it for me and he taught me how to ride a bike and I love to ride the bike with my friends.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, in elementary school. My dad bought it for me and he taught me how to ride a bike, and I loved to ride the bike with my friends.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The context describes past events (having a bike, being taught, riding as a child), so verbs should be in the past tense. Change 'I love' to 'I loved' to maintain consistent past narration. Suggestion: keep all verbs describing past experiences in past tense (had, bought, taught, loved).

× When I was a child it was really popular to UMM for kids and there was a time UMM bike is not the popular and a few years ago it started popular.

✓ When I was a child, bikes were really popular for kids, but there was a time when bikes were not popular, and a few years ago they became popular again.

Multiple tense and structure problems: 'it was really popular to UMM for kids' is ungrammatical—use plural subject 'bikes' and past tense 'were'. 'There was a time UMM bike is not the popular' mixes past and present; use 'there was a time when bikes were not popular'. 'A few years ago it started popular' is incorrect verb use—use 'they became popular again' or 'they started to become popular'. Suggestion: use clear subjects, correct plural forms, and past tense consistency when describing past trends; remove filler sounds like 'UMM'.