Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Uh, yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child because I am into driving a riding a bike and some Right now I have my own bike and when I have free time in the summer I prefer to ride a bike with my sister and brother because it's comfortable for me and I can feel.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Uh, I believe that yes, uh bikes are really popular in our country in Kazakhstan because we have a lot of sportsmen and athletes who always prefer to spend time and umm and participate in a S cycling competitions in our Rd.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: Ответ слишком витиеватый и содержит повторы и нечеткие фразы. Нужно дать чёткое вступление (topic sentence), затем 1–2 конкретных поддерживающих предложения с логическими связками. Избегайте лишних звуков («uh», «um») и ошибок в словосочетаниях («driving a riding a bike»). Также сократите ответ до максимум 3–4 предложений и добавьте конкретный пример или причину.
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I enjoyed riding it with my sister and brother in the summer because it was comfortable and fun. For example, we often cycled to the nearby park and spent hours riding together.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Ответ понятен, но содержит запинки, повторы и общие формулировки. Нужно начать с прямого утверждения, затем привести конкретную причину и пример. Используйте связки (for example, because, therefore) и исправьте неясные слова («S cycling competitions», «Rd»). Держите ответ в 2–3 предложениях.
Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Kazakhstan. Many people cycle for sport and leisure, and there are frequent local cycling competitions, so cycling culture is growing. For example, big cities often organize weekend rides and races that attract many participants.
× Uh, yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child because I am into driving a riding a bike and some Right now I have my own bike and when I have free time in the summer I prefer to ride a bike with my sister and brother because it's comfortable for me and I can feel.
✓ Uh, yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child because I am into riding a bike. Right now I have my own bike, and when I have free time in the summer I prefer to ride with my sister and brother because it's comfortable for me and I can relax.
Ошибка: неправильное использование глагольной формы после 'into'. Объяснение: После 'into' используется герундий (verb + -ing), поэтому 'driving a riding a bike' неверно. Рекомендации: Использовать 'into riding a bike' или просто 'like riding a bike'. Также убрать лишние слова 'driving' и 'a' перед 'riding'. Исправление также уточняет фразу 'I can feel' до 'I can relax' для ясности.
× Uh, I believe that yes, uh bikes are really popular in our country in Kazakhstan because we have a lot of sportsmen and athletes who always prefer to spend time and umm and participate in a S cycling competitions in our Rd.
✓ Uh, I believe that yes, bikes are really popular in Kazakhstan because we have many sportsmen and athletes who like to spend time training and participate in cycling competitions in our region.
Ошибка: неправильное употребление предлогов и словосочетаний ('in our country in Kazakhstan', 'spend time and umm and participate in a S cycling competitions in our Rd'). Объяснение: Сочетание 'in our country in Kazakhstan' избыточно — достаточно 'in Kazakhstan'. 'Spend time and participate' нужно конкретизировать — 'spend time training and participate'. 'A S cycling competitions' содержит артикль и лишние символы; использовать 'cycling competitions'. 'in our Rd' непонятно; заменено на 'in our region'. Рекомендации: Упростить предлоги, убрать повторения и опечатки, использовать 'many' для исчисляемых существительных во множественном числе.