Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Exactly why was the child my father sent back to me as my 10 years old birthday gift? I wrote it every day in my community with my friend and I was quite interested in biking.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Well, to be honest, I think in recent years biking has become more and more popular in China because it's quite a healthy program for people to exercise and also more and more people using bike to go to work or school.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 38.0Gợi ý: 语法和表达不清晰,回答未直接回应问题。建议先用一句简洁明确的主题句回答(有/没有并交代何时),然后用一到两句具体细节支持(谁送的、什么时候、如何使用、感受)。注意时态和人称一致,避免无关或混乱的句子。
Ví dụ: Yes. My father gave me a bicycle when I turned ten, and I rode it every day around my neighborhood with my friends. I enjoyed biking because it made me feel free and helped me make new friends.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 内容基本相关但表达可更简洁自然。建议先给出直接观点句,然后用两点具体原因支持,并用连接词使逻辑更连贯。注意搭配(例如 use bikes, a healthy way to exercise)。可加入简单数据或对比提高说服力。
Ví dụ: Yes, biking has become increasingly popular in China recently. Firstly, many people see it as a healthy way to exercise, and secondly, more commuters choose bikes or shared bikes to travel to work or school, which reduces traffic and is convenient.
× Exactly why was the child my father sent back to me as my 10 years old birthday gift?
✓ Exactly why did the child my father sent back to me as my 10th birthday gift?
错误类型:句子结构/时态和数词用法混乱。说明:原句使用了被动式的语序("was the child ... sent back")和疑问副词“Exactly why”搭配不自然,且“10 years old birthday”中“years old”不应用于修饰名词“birthday”,应使用序数词“10th”。建议:把动词改为助动词+动词原形的疑问句结构(did + 主语 + 动词),并将“10 years old birthday”改为“10th birthday”。另外,这句话的含义也不清楚,最好重写为更清晰的句子,例如:"Exactly why did my father give the child back to me as my 10th birthday gift?"。
× I wrote it every day in my community with my friend and I was quite interested in biking.
✓ I rode it every day in my neighborhood with my friend and I was quite interested in biking.
错误类型:句子结构/用词错误。说明:原句中使用了动词"wrote"(写)与上下文不符,应为骑行相关的动词"rode"或"ride"的过去式。此外,“in my community”更常用的表达是"in my neighborhood"。建议:把"wrote"改为"rode",并使用更地道的短语"in my neighborhood"。同时保持过去时态一致。
× Well, to be honest, I think in recent years biking has become more and more popular in China because it's quite a healthy program for people to exercise and also more and more people using bike to go to work or school.
✓ Well, to be honest, I think in recent years biking has become more and more popular in China because it's a healthy way for people to exercise and more and more people are using bikes to go to work or school.
错误类型:现在时态/动词形式与语法结构错误。说明:原句中"it's quite a healthy program"不自然,"program"不是描述骑行的恰当名词,应改为"way"或"activity"。另外,短语"more and more people using bike"缺少助动词,应为"more and more people are using bikes";“bike”应使用复数形式"bikes"更自然。建议:将"it's quite a healthy program"改为"it's a healthy way",并在后半句加上助动词"are",把"bike"改为复数"bikes",保持时态为现在完成时与现在进行或一般现在时的自然衔接。