Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Avoid short fragmented sentences and redundancy (e.g., “I did have” and “I loved it very much” together). Also correct small grammar and collocation issues (say “ride it” not “go right on it”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike as a child, and I loved riding it every day. For example, I would cycle to the park with my friends after school, which helped me become confident and skilful. I still miss those carefree afternoons sometimes.

Gợi ý: Give a clearer, structured response: start with a direct opinion, then support it with two specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., “however,” “for example,” “also”). Avoid vague phrases like “the proportion is driving” and repetitive fillers. Use correct collocations (e.g., “commute to work”).

Ví dụ: Bikes remain fairly popular in my country, although car ownership has increased recently. For example, many children still ride bikes after school for fun, and some adults use bicycles to commute short distances to work because it is cheap and convenient.

× We used to go right on it every day.

✓ We used to ride it every day.

The verb phrase 'go on' is not the natural collocation for riding a bike in English; use the verb 'ride' with the object 'it'. This is about correct verb choice and the -ing form rule (list item 8) because 'go riding' would use -ing, but here the fixed expression is 'ride it'. Suggestion: use 'ride' or say 'go riding' (e.g. 'We used to go riding every day').

× Actually. I was really good at it.

✓ Actually, I was really good at it.

The period after 'Actually' breaks the sentence and creates a sentence fragment. This is a sentence structure/punctuation issue (item 26). Combine into one sentence with a comma. Suggestion: write 'Actually, I was really good at it.' or simply 'I was actually really good at it.'

× Sometimes I miss it.

✓ Sometimes I miss it.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches the present tense meaning of a current feeling of missing the bike. No correction needed; included for completeness.

× Yes, to some extent they're popular, but before it was much easier, but just now the proportion is driving.

✓ Yes, to some extent they're popular, but it was much more common before; now more people use cars.

The original sentence has unclear phrasing and incorrect word choice ('proportion is driving') and awkward repetition of 'but'. This is a sentence structure and word-choice issue (item 26). 'Driving' as a noun here is incorrect; use 'people drive' or 'use cars'. Also 'much easier' is inappropriate; 'much more common' fits context. Suggestion: simplify and state contrast clearly: 'it was much more common before; now more people drive.'

× But yeah, it still is very popular.

✓ But yeah, they are still very popular.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'bikes' (plural) mentioned earlier. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (item 12). Use 'they' to match plural 'bikes'. Suggestion: keep consistent number agreement: 'they are still very popular.'

× The kids do use it every day for riding outside after school and and yeah, even adults use it to go from their home to job and from work to home.

✓ The kids do use them every day to ride outside after school, and even adults use bikes to go from home to work and back.

Multiple errors: pronoun number ('it' should be 'them' for 'bikes'), redundant 'and and', awkward phrasing 'to go from their home to job' and word order. These are sentence structure and pronoun errors (items 26 and 12). Also 'for riding' is less natural than 'to ride'. Suggestion: correct pronouns to plural, remove duplication, and use natural prepositional phrases: 'go from home to work and back.'