Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like “uh” and redundant phrases such as “in the past” and “instead of using that.” Also correct minor grammar (e.g. say “the distance between my house and my new school”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I had a red bike when I was younger, but since my new school is quite far from my house, I now take the school bus. For example, the journey takes about 30 minutes, so using the bus is more convenient.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and follow with a specific reason and an example. Use correct grammar (e.g. “pupils” or “students”) and smoother linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid vague phrases like “understandable.”

Ví dụ: Yes, bikes are very popular in Vietnam, especially among students, because many schools are close to students’ homes. For example, most pupils commute ten to twenty minutes by bike, which is cheap and convenient in crowded cities.

× Uh, yes, I used to have a red bike in the past but now because of the distance of my house and my new school I often use the school bus instead of using that.

✓ Uh, yes, I used to have a red bike, but now because of the distance between my house and my new school I often take the school bus instead.

The original sentence had tense and word choice issues. 'Used to have' is correct for a past habit, but 'in the past' is redundant. 'Distance of my house and my new school' uses incorrect preposition and noun phrase; it should be 'distance between my house and my new school' (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). 'Often use the school bus instead of using that' repeats 'use' and uses the vague pronoun 'that'; replace with 'often take the school bus instead.' Also punctuation improved by adding a comma before 'but.' Suggestions: remove redundancies, use 'between' for two items, and use 'take the bus' as the collocation for using bus transport. (Note: Changes limited to problems listed in the provided Grammar_Problem_Type_List.)

× Yes, definitely, especially for people pupils, because student in Vietnam often study near their house, so bike is understandable in my country.

✓ Yes, definitely, especially for pupils, because students in Vietnam often study near their houses, so bicycles are common in my country.

There are several number and article/quantifier issues. 'People pupils' is redundant; choose 'pupils' (Incorrect use of quantifiers - ID 14). 'Student in Vietnam' should be plural 'students' to match general statement (Singular and plural issue - ID 1). 'Often study near their house' should be 'near their houses' to match plural students (Singular and plural issue - ID 1). 'So bike is understandable' is ungrammatical: use plural 'bicycles are common' or 'the bike is common' (Article errors/number - ID 22 and ID 1). Also 'understandable' is incorrect choice; use 'common' or 'popular' (Incorrect use of adjectives - ID 13). Suggestions: keep noun numbers consistent, use appropriate noun choice 'bicycles' or 'the bike', and prefer 'common' or 'popular' to describe prevalence.