Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and coherent: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Also correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., “first ever bicycle”, “one of my most precious possessions/memories”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My brother bought me my first ever bicycle, and I remember feeling very proud because it was my main way of getting around the neighborhood. Although bikes were relatively expensive for many families then, having that bike gave me a lot of freedom and happy memories.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear direct opinion followed by two specific reasons, using linking words (e.g., “because”, “however”, “for example”). Avoid fillers (“uh”, “like”) and finish your idea—don't leave sentences incomplete. Add a concrete example of a safety issue.

Ví dụ: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because more people are exercising and commuting by bike. However, bike safety is a concern because many roads lack dedicated lanes and traffic can be chaotic; for example, cyclists often have to share narrow streets with fast-moving vehicles, which increases the risk of accidents.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is unnecessary emphatic past construction; simple past 'had' is more natural and fits the question asking about past possession. Suggestion: use simple past for common past statements (I had).

× It was one of my most precious moments since my brother was the one who bought my first every bicycle.

✓ It was one of my most precious memories because my brother bought my very first bicycle.

Problems: word choice and order ('moments' vs 'memories'), incorrect adverb 'every' and awkward connector 'since' here is causal but 'because' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'memory' for recollection, 'very first' for emphasis, and 'because' for causal clarity.

× I believe that it was much more expensive back then since bicycles are more situated at a higher level of costs for a lot of people.

✓ I believe that it was much more expensive back then because bicycles were relatively costly for many people.

Tense inconsistency: speaker refers to past ('was') then uses present 'are' and awkward phrase 'more situated at a higher level of costs'. Use past reference 'were' and simpler vocabulary 'costly' or 'expensive'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and choose clear adjectives.

× Nevertheless, it's one of my most.

✓ Nevertheless, it is one of my most treasured possessions.

Incomplete sentence: 'one of my most' is unfinished. Provide a noun to complete the comparison (e.g., 'treasured possessions' or 'favorite memories'). Suggestion: always finish 'one of my most...' with a clear noun phrase.

× Yes, bicycles are popular in my country, especially right now that a lot of Filipinos are engaging on physical activities.

✓ Yes, bicycles are popular in my country, especially now that many Filipinos are engaging in physical activities.

Incorrect preposition 'engaging on' should be 'engaging in'. Also 'right now that' is awkward; 'now that' is better. Use 'many' rather than 'a lot of' for more formal speech.

× However, I believe that in terms of safety, bicycles are not well focused on since uh, on roads there are a lot of like roads that are not convenient for.

✓ However, I believe that in terms of safety, bicycles are not well supported because many roads are not suitable for them.

Sentence has disfluencies ('uh', 'a lot of like roads') and is incomplete ('not convenient for' what?). 'Not well focused on' is unnatural; use 'not well supported'. Clarify object 'for them' (for bicycles). Suggestion: remove fillers, simplify structure, and complete the idea.