Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I did.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
No, I don't umm, cause umm, no, people in Japan tend to use, uh, prefer, prefer to use cars and they don't wanna, they don't wanna ride a bikes. Umm, I think yeah.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答は短く簡潔ですが、内容が非常に限定的で発展がありません。Part1では直接答えた後に簡単な補足を加えるとより自然で効果的です。例えば、いつどのように使っていたか、誰と乗っていたか、どんな思い出があるかなど、具体的な情報を一つか二つ付け加えると良いです。また、口ごもり(umm, uh)を減らし、流暢さを高める練習をしてください。
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike that I used to ride around my neighborhood every weekend with my friends. It was how I learned to be independent and we often raced each other after school.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 答えは意見を述べていますが、理由や具体例が乏しく、語の繰り返しやためらいが多く流暢さが低下しています。まず簡潔なトピックセンテンスで意見を述べ、その後に一つか二つの具体的な理由や例をつなぎ言葉(for example, because, so)で示してください。例えば、都市と地方で違いがある点や通勤スタイル、交通安全の理由などを挙げると説得力が増します。
Ví dụ: Not really. In many parts of Japan people prefer cars or public transport for commuting because distances can be long and weather is often a problem. For example, in suburban areas most families own cars, so cycling is more common among children than adults.
× No, I don't umm, cause umm, no, people in Japan tend to use, uh, prefer, prefer to use cars and they don't wanna, they don't wanna ride a bikes. Umm, I think yeah.
✓ No, I don't. People in Japan tend to prefer using cars and they don't want to ride bikes.
問題点の分類: 2 (Third person singular issue) と 1 (Singular and plural issue) およびその他のコロケーションと口語表現の不適切さ。理由: 'I don't umm, cause umm' は会話のフィラーが多く文として不明瞭で省くべきです。'tend to use, uh, prefer, prefer to use cars' は語順と語の重複が不適切で、'tend to prefer using cars' または 'tend to use cars' のどちらかに整理する必要があります。'they don't wanna, they don't wanna ride a bikes' は口語の 'wanna' を正式な 'want to' に直すべきであり、'a bikes' は単数不一致なので複数形 'bikes' が正しいです。改善の提案: フィラーを削除し、動詞フレーズを統一する(例: 'tend to prefer using cars')、口語 'wanna' を 'want to' に置き換え、冠詞を複数形に合わせる。例文: 'No, I don't. People in Japan tend to prefer using cars and they don't want to ride bikes.'