Bike— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and articles, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (e.g., "uh") and unclear phrases ("around my relation").

Ví dụ: Yes. I got my first bike when I was about eight years old because my father bought it for me. After school I used to ride it in the evenings around my neighborhood, and I enjoyed practicing turns and riding with friends.

Gợi ý: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Correct plural and article errors, and avoid hesitation. Mention concrete examples or comparisons to strengthen your answer.

Ví dụ: Not really. Most people use cars or motorbikes in my city, so bicycles are less common. For example, on my commute I see many cars and scooters but very few cyclists, although I believe cycling would be good for health and traffic reduction.

× Yes, uh, when I was young where I think I was like 8 year old, my father bought me a bike.

✓ Yes, uh, when I was young, I think I was about 8 years old, my father bought me a bike.

The phrase '8 year old' should be plural '8 years old' when used predicatively. Remove the extraneous word 'where' and use 'about' or 'around' for approximation. Also add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: say 'I think I was about 8 years old' for natural phrasing.

× I used to ride it in the evening after the school around my relation.

✓ I used to ride it in the evening after school around my neighborhood.

The phrase 'after the school' should be 'after school' (no definite article) when referring to the general time. 'Around my relation' is incorrect; likely intended 'around my neighborhood' or 'around where I lived'. Use a correct locative noun. Suggestion: replace with 'around my neighborhood' or 'near my home.'

× I don't think so because when I go to work there are a lot of cars and motorbike, uh, fewer bicycle, but I think it good to have some.

✓ I don't think so because when I go to work there are a lot of cars and motorbikes, and fewer bicycles, but I think it's good to have some.

Plural forms required: 'motorbike' should be 'motorbikes' and 'bicycle' should be 'bicycles' to agree with 'a lot of' and 'fewer.' Also missing verb 'is' in 'I think it's good to have some.' Add 'and' to connect clauses. Suggestion: ensure plural nouns when referring to multiple items and include the verb 'is' in 'it's.'