Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Of course I had a bike when I was a child, it was red and also I think my bike was very interesting and cute to me and I cycled cycled every day on my street when I was a child. Umm also it was so good because it helped me to be active and explore.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
MMM In my opinion I think bikes really popular in my country and because it is very healthy for our body and it's help me to be strong and to keep fit I think.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Старайтесь давать более структурированные ответы: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте одно-две конкретные детали и закончите кратким выводом. Избегайте повтора слов (например, «cycled cycled») и лишних слов («also», «I think») без конкретики. Используйте связки (for example, because, so) чтобы сделать ответ логичным и кратким. Также добавьте конкретные примеры или воспоминания (где вы катались, с кем, какие ощущения), чтобы повысить релевантность и выразительность.
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. It was a small red bicycle with a bell, and I rode it every afternoon along my street with my friends. Because of that, I became more active and enjoyed exploring nearby parks and shops.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Дайте чёткое вступление и поддержите его двумя конкретными причинами с примером или кратким объяснением. Избегайте заполнителей («MMM», «I think» многократно) и следите за грамматикой (например, «they are popular», «they help people»). Используйте связки (for example, furthermore, because) чтобы структура была логичной и объём — не более 3–4 предложений.
Ví dụ: Yes, I believe bicycles are quite popular in my country. For one thing, many people use them for short commutes because cycling is inexpensive and convenient. For example, I often see office workers and students riding bikes to work and university, which helps them stay fit.
× MMM In my opinion I think bikes really popular in my country and because it is very healthy for our body and it's help me to be strong and to keep fit I think.
✓ In my opinion, I think bikes are really popular in my country because they are very healthy for our bodies and they help me to be strong and to keep fit.
Ошибка в согласовании числа существительных и местоимений: слово 'bikes' во множественном числе требует множественного глагола и местоимений ('are', 'they'). Также 'body' должен быть во множественном или обобщённом варианте 'bodies' при ссылке на людей в целом. Исправление: используйте глагол и местоимения во множественном числе, добавьте запятую после вводной фразы для ясности. (Use plural verb forms and pronouns to agree with plural nouns; add punctuation for clarity.)
× ...and it's help me to be strong and to keep fit I think.
✓ ...and it helps me to be strong and to keep fit, I think.
Ошибка третьего лица единственного числа: при использовании местоимения 'it' глагол требует окончания -s в настоящем простом времени ('helps'). Исправление: добавьте -s к глаголу 'help'. (For third-person singular subjects in present simple, add -s to the verb.)
× Of course I had a bike when I was a child, it was red and also I think my bike was very interesting and cute to me and I cycled cycled every day on my street when I was a child. Umm also it was so good because it helped me to be active and explore.
✓ Of course I had a bike when I was a child. It was red, and I thought it was very interesting and cute. I rode it every day on my street. It was great because it helped me to be active and to explore.
Несколько проблем со структурой предложения: оригинал содержит длинные связанные фразы без подходящей пунктуации и повтор слова 'cycled'. Также сочетание времён и словоформ ('cycled cycled') и повторы делают речь неясной. Исправление: разделите на несколько предложений, замените повтор и используйте глагол 'rode' вместо 'cycled' для естественности; согласуйте времена (past simple) и добавьте связку 'to' перед 'explore'. (Break long run-on sentences into shorter ones, remove repetitions, use appropriate past-tense verb forms and infinitive markers.)