Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Uh yeah, I had a bike when I was a child. Especially at first I used 4 hill bikes, but uh, I practice a lot. And then I finally got it, just two wheel bikes.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Umm, I think it's not that much popular compared to other country, uh, especially in Japan or Canada. I had before I saw lots of people commute with bike, but to be honest, we don't use bike a lot. We don't have any bike way or something.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 답변을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 만들려면 불필요한 반복과 어색한 표현을 줄이고 문장 구조를 정리하세요. 예를 들어 ‘4 hill bikes’ 같은 표현은 의미가 불분명하므로 ‘training wheels’(보조바퀴)를 사용했다는 점을 명확히 하고, 시제와 관사 사용을 바로잡으세요. 또한 linking word(예: “At first”, “Afterwards”, “Eventually”)를 사용해 사건의 순서를 자연스럽게 연결하면 응답이 더 논리적으로 들립니다.
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. At first I rode a bike with training wheels, and I practiced a lot. After a few months of practice, I finally learned to ride a two-wheeled bike on my own.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 의견을 더 설득력 있게 만들려면 비교 표현과 구체적 근거를 제시하세요. 예를 들어 'not that much popular compared to other countries' 대신 'less popular than in countries like Japan or the Netherlands'처럼 구체적으로 말하고, 이유(예: 인프라 부족, 교통 문화)를 명확히 제시하세요. 또한 ‘bike way’ 대신 ‘bike lanes’를 사용하고, 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요. 연결어(예: 'because', 'for example', 'however')를 사용해 논리 흐름을 개선하세요.
Ví dụ: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country compared to places like Japan or the Netherlands. For example, many cities lack dedicated bike lanes and people prefer cars or public transport, so fewer people commute by bicycle here.
× Uh yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.
✓ Uh yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.
The sentence is already correct past tense; no change needed. Keep using past tense for childhood events. Grammar problem type ID: 5
× Especially at first I used 4 hill bikes, but uh, I practice a lot.
✓ Especially at first I used 4-wheel bikes, but uh, I practiced a lot.
원문은 'used 4 hill bikes'에서 명사 표현과 형태가 부적절합니다. '4-wheel bikes'로 수식어를 올바르게 만들고, 문맥상 과거 반복 동작이므로 'practice'를 과거형 'practiced'로 바꿔야 합니다. 제안: 과거 상황을 말할 때는 동사를 과거형으로 일관되게 사용하세요. Grammar problem type ID: 1
× And then I finally got it, just two wheel bikes.
✓ And then I finally got it: a two-wheel bike.
원문은 'just two wheel bikes'에서 관사와 복수/단수 혼동이 있습니다. 'got it'이 단수 대상을 가리키므로 'a two-wheel bike'로 수정해야 합니다. 또한 복합 형용사는 하이픈으로 연결하세요. Grammar problem type ID: 9
× Umm, I think it's not that much popular compared to other country, uh, especially in Japan or Canada.
✓ Umm, I think bikes are not that popular compared to other countries, especially in Japan or Canada.
'it's not that much popular'는 형용사 수식 표현이 부적절합니다. 주어인 'bikes'를 명시하고 'not that popular'라고 표현하세요. 또한 'other country'는 복수형 'other countries'가 자연스럽습니다. Grammar problem type ID: 6
× I had before I saw lots of people commute with bike, but to be honest, we don't use bike a lot.
✓ Before, I had seen lots of people commuting by bike, but to be honest, we don't use bikes a lot.
시제와 동명사/전치사 사용이 혼합되어 있습니다. 'I had before I saw'는 어색하므로 'Before, I had seen' 또는 간단히 'I saw'로 정리해야 합니다. 또한 'commute with bike'는 'commuting by bike'가 자연스럽고, 일반적인 복수 표현으로 'bikes'를 사용하세요. Grammar problem type ID: 5
× We don't have any bike way or something.
✓ We don't have any bike lanes or anything like that.
'bike way'는 자연스러운 영어 표현이 아니며, 올바른 표현은 'bike lane' 또는 복수 'bike lanes'입니다. 또한 구어체 'or something'은 'or anything like that'로 더 명확하게 고칠 수 있습니다. Grammar problem type ID: 11