Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course. I had a bike when I was a child. It was small and red.
Giám khảo
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Thí sinh
Bikes are important role in my country such as traffic jam.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Điểm: 78.0Gợi ý: 문장은 직접적으로 질문에 답하고 있지만 표현이 다소 반복적이고 상세한 설명이 부족합니다. 자연스럽고 효과적인 답변을 위해 토픽 문장 다음에 한두 개의 구체적 세부사항(예: 누가 사주었는지, 어디에서 탔는지, 그 자전거로 무엇을 배웠는지)을 연결어(예: "and", "because", "so", "for example")를 사용해 덧붙이세요. 또한 문장 길이를 2~4문장으로 유지하면서 중복을 피하세요.
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bicycle when I was six, and I rode it around our neighborhood every afternoon. Because it had training wheels at first, I learned to balance quickly and felt very proud when I could ride without them.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Điểm: 52.0Gợi ý: 의도는 이해되지만 문법과 표현이 어색하고 구체성도 부족합니다. 먼저 간단한 주제 문장으로 의견을 밝힌 뒤, 이유를 연결어(예: "because", "because of", "for example")로 제시하세요. 가능한 한 구체적인 예시(예: 통근용, 환경 문제, 자전거 도로 부족 등)를 들어 설명하면 더 설득력 있습니다. 또한 'important role' 대신 'play an important role' 또는 'are popular' 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.
Ví dụ: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them to avoid traffic jams. For example, commuters often cycle short distances to work, and students ride to school since it's cheaper and faster than driving.
× Bikes are important role in my country such as traffic jam.
✓ Bikes play an important role in my country, for example in reducing traffic jams.
The original sentence misuses a noun phrase 'important role' without a verb and omits a preposition and an article. Use the verb phrase 'play an important role' to connect subject and role (grammar problem type: incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure). Also use 'for example' or 'such as' correctly to introduce an example and make 'traffic jams' plural. Suggested improvement: include the verb 'play', add the article 'an' before 'important role', and use a linking phrase ('for example' or 'such as') followed by a plural noun 'traffic jams'.