Study— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答直接且信息明确，但句子可更自然并稍作扩展以展示更多细节。可以把“music is my main subject”改为更地道的说法并补充一句说明为什么选择音乐或强调学业性质。注意句子长度不超过5句，避免简单断句。

Ví dụ: I'm currently a high school student, and I specialise in music as my major subject because I want to become a professional cellist.

Gợi ý: 回答内容具体且相关，说明了原因，但口语中“like”显得有些随意，可替换为更正式的表达，并用连词使句子更连贯。注意避免用太多填充词。

Ví dụ: I usually study at home because I need to practise the cello for six to eight hours a day, so attending school would leave me with insufficient practice time.

Gợi ý: 结构基本合适，但第二句有语法问题和冗余。把否定部分简化并用连接词自然衔接，避免重复表达“little downside is”。可进一步说明不能见到同学的影响。

Ví dụ: Yes, it's convenient because I can practise the cello whenever I want without disturbing anyone, but I do miss seeing my classmates regularly, which limits my social interaction.

Gợi ý: 回答意图明确，但有词汇和语法错误（“sound proven”应为“soundproofing”或“soundproofing measures”）。应使用准确词汇并稍作说明如何改进，以及简短提到好处。

Ví dụ: I'd like to add better soundproofing to my practice room so I can play more freely without disturbing my neighbours or family, and perhaps install acoustic panels to improve the sound quality.

Gợi ý: 回答清晰但可以更自信和具体。去掉句末疑问语气，补充一两句说明你为实现目标正在做的准备或选择该院校的原因，以显得更有计划性。

Ví dụ: I plan to continue my music studies and aim to join a music conservatory; I'm currently preparing audition pieces and taking advanced cello lessons to strengthen my application.

× I'm currently a high school student and music is my main subject

✓ I'm currently a high school student, and music is my main subject.

句子需要在两个并列分句之间加逗号（或连词连接）以形成完整的并列句，原句没有标点使其显得连贯性不足。建议在并列连词前加逗号或重组为两个句子以提高可读性。

× I typically study at home because I have to practice the cello for like six to eight hours a day. So going to school would leave me little practice time.

✓ I typically study at home because I have to practice the cello for six to eight hours a day, so going to school would leave me little practice time.

第一句中“for like six to eight hours”中“like”为口语填充词，在正式表达中应去掉。第二句与前句逻辑连续，应合并为一个复合句或用小写连接，以避免句子碎片化。建议去掉“like”，将两句用逗号和连词连接。

× Yes, absolutely. I can practice my cello whenever I want without disturbing anyone. But there's still a little downside is that I can't meet my classmates every day.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I can practice my cello whenever I want without disturbing anyone, but there's a small downside: I can't meet my classmates every day.

原句中“But there's still a little downside is that…”包含多余的系动结构（there's）和主语从句重复，造成结构混乱。应去掉重复部分，使用冒号或逗号加连词来引出具体问题，并将“a little downside”改为更自然的“a small downside”。

× I would like to add better sound proven in my practice room so that I can practice my cello more freely without disturbing my neighbors or my family members.

✓ I would like to add better soundproofing in my practice room so that I can practice my cello more freely without disturbing my neighbors or my family members.

原句中“sound proven”是拼写或词汇错误，应为“soundproofing”（隔音材料/隔音设施）。此外“neighbors or my family members”可简化为“neighbors and family members”。建议使用正确名词“soundproofing”。

× I plan to continue in my music studies and I hope to join a music conservatory in the future?

✓ I plan to continue my music studies, and I hope to join a music conservatory in the future.

句末不应使用问号，因为这是陈述句而非疑问句；“continue in my music studies”常见但更自然的表达是“continue my music studies”。此外并列分句之间加逗号更符合书写规范。