Study— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct school name spelling and verb forms.

Ví dụ: I'm a student studying fine art at Nelson Junior High School. I major in oil painting, and I have been studying art for nearly six years, so I have a solid foundation in technique.

Gợi ý: Use a clear topic sentence naming the place, then give specific reasons with correct word choice and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "countryside of renewing."

Ví dụ: I study fine art at Nielsen Junior High School, which is located in a rural area. I chose this school because it focuses on foundational skills I need to become a concept artist, such as drawing and color theory.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and naturally, fix grammar and use linking words to add one specific reason. Keep to two or three sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, it's a good place to study. We have art classes every morning, so we can spend more time practicing techniques than students at other schools.

Gợi ý: Clarify the problem and propose a specific, concise solution. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. "strict" management of smart devices) and linking words to connect reason and suggestion.

Ví dụ: Yes. The school has very strict rules on using smartphones, which sometimes prevents us from accessing online references during study time. I think the school should simplify the permission process so students can use devices for learning under supervision.

Gợi ý: Be precise about your plan and use natural phrasing. Start with the main intention, then add two specific reasons why that university suits you, using linking words.

Ví dụ: I plan to apply to the College of Multidisciplinary Science at King Monkwood University of Technology. The university is well known for its fine art and design programs, so I believe it will help me develop the skills needed to become a concept artist.

× I'm studying fine art in Nelson Junior High School.

✓ I'm studying fine art at Nelson Junior High School.

Use 'at' for institutions; also no article needed before the school name. Saying 'in Nelson Junior High School' is incorrect preposition use for attending an institution (also relates to Problem Type 11), but per instructions correct only listed types: Article/preposition usage here is best fixed by changing preposition to 'at'. Suggestion: say 'at Nelson Junior High School.'

× It is a school of the art in countryside.

✓ It is a countryside school of art.

Word order and choice are incorrect. 'the art' is unnecessary and 'in countryside' needs an article or adjective form. Reordering to 'a countryside school of art' makes it grammatical and clear. Use 'a' before 'countryside' because it's countable in this adjective phrase.

× I have learned art for almost 6 years.

✓ I have been learning art for almost six years.

When indicating an action that started in the past and continues to the present, use present perfect continuous ('have been learning'). Also write numbers in words in formal speech: 'six years.' This corrects tense usage and improves clarity.

× This school is in the countryside of renewing.

✓ This school is in a renewing countryside.

Original phrase 'countryside of renewing' is ungrammatical. 'Countryside' is singular and needs an article; 'renewing' must modify it as an adjective. Better: 'in a renewing countryside' or rephrase to 'in a rural area undergoing renewal.'

× The reason I learn art at this school is because I want to become a concept artist in the future, so I must master the basic skills.

✓ The reason I study art at this school is that I want to become a concept artist, so I must master the basic skills.

Use 'study' instead of 'learn' for enrolled education; 'is that' is more formal and avoids redundancy with 'because.' Present simple 'want' is correct; removing 'in the future' is optional because 'want to become' implies future. This fixes verb choice and improves sentence structure.

× It is actually a place appropriate to study.

✓ It is actually an appropriate place to study.

Adjective order needs adjustment: 'an appropriate place to study' is the natural word order. Also use the article 'an' before a vowel sound 'appropriate.'

× We have art class in whole morning so we can spend more time on practicing our art skills than students of other school.

✓ We have art classes the whole morning, so we can spend more time practicing our art skills than students at other schools.

Use plural 'art classes' or 'art class' with article; 'the whole morning' is correct phrase; 'practicing' not 'on practicing'; comparative phrase should be 'than students at other schools.' This fixes quantifier/plural and preposition issues.

× Yes, I would like my school to make some changes.

✓ Yes, I would like my school to make some changes.

Sentence is correct; no article error. Kept unchanged.

× For example our school is serious on management of smart device.

✓ For example, our school is strict about managing smart devices.

Use 'strict about' rather than 'serious on'; use 'managing' as the gerund and pluralize 'smart devices.' This corrects preposition and word choice.

× Those user make us hard to practice our skill or do our homework in our self study time.

✓ Those users make it hard for us to practice our skills or do our homework during self-study time.

Pluralize 'users'; add 'it' as a dummy subject 'make it hard'; 'for us' needed; 'skills' plural; 'during self-study time' is correct prepositional phrase. This fixes pronoun/number and sentence structure errors.

× In my opinion school should let our apply process easier then we can use our devices.

✓ In my opinion, the school should make the application process easier so that we can use our devices.

Add 'the' before 'school' and 'application process' is the correct noun phrase; 'make...easier' instead of 'let our apply process easier'; use 'so that' to show purpose and 'then' -> 'so that.' This fixes preposition/article and sentence structure issues.

× I would like to apply College of Multidisciplinary science in King Monkwood University of Technology Stanley.

✓ I would like to apply to the College of Multidisciplinary Science at King Monkwood University of Technology, Stanley.

Use verb 'apply to' with 'to'; include the definite article 'the' before the college name; capitalize proper nouns and use 'at' for the university location. This corrects modal/verb + preposition usage.

× This school is highly renowned in the field of fine art and design.

✓ This school is highly renowned in the field of fine arts and design.

Use plural 'fine arts' when referring to the academic field; otherwise sentence is fine. This fixes adjective/noun form.

× It is appropriate to me to learn the skill to become a concept artist.

✓ It is appropriate for me to learn the skills to become a concept artist.

Use 'for me' rather than 'to me' in this structure; 'skills' plural is more natural; 'to become' is correct. This corrects preposition choice and number.