Study— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 答えは明確で内容もわかりやすいですが、文法と流暢さを改善するとさらに良くなります。特にコンマでつなぐ代わりに短い文や接続詞を使い、

Ví dụ: のような大文字小文字の一貫性（Health → health）が必要です。また、一文の長さは最大5文以内を維持してください。具体的には、主題文（topic sentence）に続けて専攻を補足する自然な形にすると良いです。例："I'm a first-year student. I major in sports and health science." さらに、

Gợi ý: 回答は場所を伝えていますが、不自然な語順と冗長さがあります。より自然で簡潔な表現（場所→具体的な位置の順）にし、前置詞の使い方を修正してください。例えば、"I study at a university near Kanagawa Prefecture." のように言うと自然です。必要ならキャンパス名や街の名前を付け加えて具体性を出しましょう。

Ví dụ: I study at a university near Kanagawa Prefecture. It's about 30 minutes from the city and surrounded by parks.

Gợi ý: 答えは肯定していますが、理由の説明が不自然で語彙の誤用（"ice"）や文の断片（"I like very."）があります。理由は具体的かつ一貫した文で述べ、つなぎ言葉（because, so, therefore）を使って論理的に示しましょう。例えば、「自然が多くて静かなので集中できる」といった具体例を挙げると良いです。

Ví dụ: Yes, it's a great place to study because it's surrounded by nature, which makes it quiet and relaxing. For example, there are several parks and trails where I can exercise and clear my mind.

Gợi ý: 意図は伝わりますが、文が断片化していて流れが悪いです。'which helps me' の後に具体的にどう助けるか説明すると説得力が増します（reduce stress, improve focus など）。接続詞と完全な文を使い、自然なリズムで話す練習をしてください。

Ví dụ: I wouldn't want many changes because being surrounded by nature helps me reduce stress and stay focused. For instance, walking in the nearby woods after classes helps me relax.

Gợi ý: 意図は理解できますが、英語表現が不正確で断片的です。'correct' は誤用で、'clear' や 'definite' を使うべきです。また、"walk in a sports related jobs" は不自然で、'work in a sports-related job'が正しい表現です。将来の計画を一貫した文で述べ、可能なら具体的な職種や学びたい分野を付け加えてください。

Ví dụ: I don't have a definite plan yet, but I hope to work in a sports-related job in the future, such as a fitness coach or sports therapist, and continue studying sports science.

× I'm a first year student, I'm majoring in sports and Health Science.

✓ I'm a first-year student; I'm majoring in Sports and Health Science.

Use the hyphenated form 'first-year' as a compound adjective before 'student'. Capitalize proper names of academic fields as appropriate and include the definite article or correct capitalization for consistency. Also separate independent clauses with a semicolon or period rather than a comma to avoid a comma splice. Suggestion: Write 'I'm a first-year student. I'm majoring in Sports and Health Science.'

× I study at my university where it is located near Kanagawa Prefecture.

✓ I study at the university, which is located near Kanagawa Prefecture.

The relative clause should be attached with 'which' referring to 'the university'; use 'the university' rather than 'my university where it is located' to avoid awkwardness. Remove the redundant 'where'. Suggestion: Use 'I study at the university, which is located near Kanagawa Prefecture.'

× Yes, I think so. This is because there is a lot of nature and ice. I like very. I like nature very much.

✓ Yes, I think so. This is because there is a lot of nature and nice scenery. I really like it. I like nature very much.

'There is a lot of nature and ice' is unnatural; possibly 'nice scenery' or 'greenery' fits. 'I like very' is incomplete; adverb 'very' must modify an adjective or be part of 'I like it very much' or 'I really like it.' Suggestion: Clarify what 'ice' refers to or replace with appropriate noun and use 'I really like it' or 'I like nature very much.'

× I don't think so because I like being surrounded by nature, which. Helps. Me. It is my stress.

✓ I don't think so because I like being surrounded by nature, which helps me relax and relieves my stress.

Fragments 'which. Helps. Me.' are sentence fragments; they should be combined into one relative clause. 'It is my stress' is incorrect; likely intended 'it relieves my stress' or 'it reduces my stress.' Suggestion: Use a complete clause: 'which helps me relax and relieves my stress.'

× I don't have a correct future plans, but I want to. Walk. In a sports related jobs in the future.

✓ I don't have clear future plans, but I want to work in a sports-related job in the future.

'I don't have a correct future plans' has article and adjective issues; use 'clear future plans' and match singular/plural. Fragments 'I want to. Walk.' should be a single clause 'I want to work'. 'sports related jobs' needs hyphen and singular 'job' to match 'a'. Suggestion: Say 'I don't have clear future plans, but I want to work in a sports-related job in the future.'