Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I often take part in activities It's because I am very outgoing and have lots of friends. I often with my friends go to playground to play. So I think it's very happy and very interesting.
Giám khảo
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course in my opinion, I think people should try other Mini different scenes because different scenes can make your emotions very strengthened and improve your voice.
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 回答基本切题,也提到了性格和朋友,但时态、句子结构和表达自然度需要改进。过去的经历应使用一般过去时,例如“took part”而不是“take part”。“I often with my friends go to playground”语序错误,应改为“I often went to the playground with my friends”。此外,“It’s because”连接不自然,建议用“because”直接解释原因;“very happy and very interesting”过于笼统,可以具体说明参加活动带来的感受或活动类型。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had many opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. Because I was quite outgoing, I often went to the playground with my friends after school. We played games such as hide-and-seek and badminton, so I always had a great time.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Điểm: 35.0Gợi ý: 回答表达了明确观点,但存在明显的词汇误用和不自然表达。“other Mini different scenes”不符合语境,应改为“different activities”或“new experiences”;“make your emotions very strengthened”以及“improve your voice”无法准确表达尝试新事物的好处。建议采用清晰结构:先给出观点,再说明原因,最后补充一个具体结果或例子。避免同时使用“Yes, of course”“in my opinion”和“I think”,保留一种即可。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. Trying new things can help them discover their interests and become more confident. For example, someone who joins a sports club may develop a new skill and make some new friends.
× Yes, I often take part in activities.
✓ Yes, I often took part in activities.
问题是在谈论“as a child”(小时候)的经历,所以应该使用一般过去时。将“take”改为过去式“took”。
× Yes, I often take part in activities It's because I am very outgoing and have lots of friends.
✓ Yes, I often took part in activities because I was very outgoing and had lots of friends.
原句中两个句子直接连接,句子结构不完整。可以用连词“because”将原因和主要观点连接起来。同时,因为描述的是童年经历,所以“am”和“have”应改为过去式“was”和“had”。
× I often with my friends go to playground to play.
✓ I often went to the playground with my friends to play.
频率副词“often”通常放在实义动词前面;“with my friends”应放在动词后面,使语序更自然。此外,过去时“went”与童年经历保持一致。
× I often with my friends go to playground to play.
✓ I often went to the playground with my friends to play.
“playground”是可数名词单数,前面需要使用冠词。这里指具体的游乐场,因此使用定冠词“the”。
× So I think it's very happy and very interesting.
✓ So I thought they were very fun and interesting.
“happy”通常用来形容人,而不能自然地形容活动。活动可以用“fun”或“interesting”来描述。另外,“they”指代前面的 activities,“were”与过去时和复数主语保持一致。
× People should try other Mini different scenes.
✓ People should try many different activities.
原句中的修饰词排列不自然,“Mini”也不适合放在这里。表达“许多不同的活动”时,应使用“many different activities”的顺序。
× Different scenes can make your emotions very strengthened.
✓ Different activities can make you feel stronger emotions.
“make”后面通常接宾语加形容词,或接宾语加动词原形。 “very strengthened”搭配不自然;这里可以说“make you feel stronger emotions”,意思是“让你产生更强烈的情感”。