Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Answer directly and use more natural phrasing. “Due to my parents” should be replaced with “Thanks to my parents,” and “personally characteristic wise” is unnatural; say “By nature” or “Personally.” Complete your final idea and add one specific example of an activity you tried. Use a linking word such as “however” to connect your parents’ encouragement with your own lack of curiosity.

Ví dụ: Yes, thanks to my parents, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities, such as swimming and drawing. However, I was quite cautious by nature and usually preferred familiar things. For example, although my parents encouraged me to join a sports club, I stopped after a few weeks because I was not very interested in it.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and improve grammatical accuracy. The phrase “opportunities you don't always get them” is incorrect; say “you do not always get these opportunities.” Avoid the vague expression “take as much as you can” and explain what people can gain, such as discovering their interests or developing useful skills. Use a linking word like “because” or “as a result” to make the reason and result clearer.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try a wide range of activities whenever possible because opportunities do not always come along twice. Trying different things can help them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who joins a drama club may realize that they are more confident and creative than they had expected.

× Due to my parents, yes, I had a lot of opportunities to take part in new activities as a child, but personally characteristic wise I don't think I was very interested in different or new activities.

✓ Due to my parents, yes, I had a lot of opportunities to take part in new activities as a child, but in terms of my personality, I don't think I was very interested in different or new activities.

Personally characteristic wise is not a grammatically correct expression. Use the clearer phrase in terms of my personality. When describing a person’s character or personality, use a noun phrase such as personal characteristics or personality rather than combining an adjective and wise in this way.

× I liked what I always said stuck with

✓ I liked things that I was familiar with.

The original sentence has an incomplete and incorrect structure. The clause what I always said stuck with does not form a meaningful grammatical sentence. Use things that I was familiar with to express the idea that you preferred familiar activities or things.

× Yes, they definitely should because opportunities you don't always get them so they're actually once in a lifetime.

✓ Yes, they definitely should because you do not always get these opportunities, so they can actually be once-in-a-lifetime opportunities.

The noun opportunities and the pronoun them are used redundantly in the phrase opportunities you do not always get them. Use either these opportunities or them, but not both as the object of the same clause. Also, once-in-a-lifetime is hyphenated when it functions as an adjective before the noun opportunities.

× So take as much as you can and actually try to make something out of it.

✓ So take as many opportunities as you can and actually try to make something out of them.

Opportunities is a countable plural noun, so use many rather than much. The pronoun them is also required because it refers back to the plural noun opportunities. Use much with uncountable nouns, such as time or advice, and many with countable plural nouns, such as opportunities or activities.