Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Answer the question more directly by stating which activities you tried. Use natural collocations such as “attended a well-known school” instead of “did my primary education from an institute.” Also, “head coach” is probably inaccurate if you were a student; “team captain” or “football team member” would be more appropriate. Avoid the unfinished phrase “I had greater use” and add one clear result or personal benefit. Use linking words such as “for example” and “as a result” to organize your answer.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I attended a well-known primary school that offered a wide range of extracurricular activities. For example, I played football and became the captain of my school team. As a result, I developed my teamwork and leadership skills.

Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons. The sentence is difficult to follow because “whereas” is used incorrectly and the ideas about extracurricular activities, cooking, and cleaning are not logically connected. Replace “extra Co curricular activities” with “extracurricular activities,” avoid fillers such as “you know,” and use a concrete example to explain how trying different activities benefits people. Keep the response to three or four well-connected sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because they can discover new interests and develop useful skills. For instance, learning to cook can make someone more independent, while joining a sports club can improve their teamwork. Even if they do not enjoy every activity, these experiences can help them understand their strengths and preferences.

× I did my primary education from a very well renowned institute.

✓ I received my primary education at a very well-renowned institute.

The preposition from is not the natural choice when identifying the institution where someone studied. Use at with an educational institution. The verb receive is also more natural than do with education. Well-renowned is written as a hyphenated compound adjective before a noun.

× Yes, I do think that people should try as many different things as they can because extra Co curricular activities, whereas some usual things might later be proven of much greater importance such as just a simple activity like cooking or you know, cleaning might not be the only life lessons that are necessary.

✓ Yes, I do think that people should try as many different things as they can because extracurricular activities, as well as ordinary activities such as cooking and cleaning, may later prove to be much more important than we expect and can teach us necessary life lessons.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined in an unclear and grammatically incomplete structure. Whereas does not correctly connect the ideas in this context, and the phrase proven of much greater importance is incorrectly structured. Use may later prove to be much more important to express a possible future result. Keep related ideas together and use parallel structures, such as cooking and cleaning.