Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Ответ в целом релевантный и содержит конкретный пример — игру на пианино, однако фраза «I had a little money to take part in new activities» звучит нелогично: скорее всего, вы хотели сказать, что у вас было немного возможностей или что родители оплачивали занятия. Объедините первые две мысли с помощью связки «because» или «so», чтобы структура была более естественной. Избегайте слишком общей и эмоциональной фразы «the best thing ever»; лучше объясните, почему вам понравилось пианино. Также следите за пунктуацией и паузами после «Yes» и «when I was a child».

Ví dụ: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. My parents encouraged me to do sports and take music lessons, so I learned to play the piano. I enjoyed it because it helped me relax and express my creativity.

Gợi ý: Основная идея понятна, но ответ обрывается и содержит грамматическую ошибку в конце: «It to». После «help» используйте параллельную структуру: «help them find hobbies, practise different sports and learn new skills» без повторяющегося «to». Выражение «practice a lot of sports» неестественно; лучше сказать «try different sports» или «take part in various activities». Добавьте один конкретный результат или пример, например развитие уверенности или обнаружение нового таланта, и завершите ответ полноценным предложением.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, especially when they are young. This can help them discover their interests, develop new skills and become more confident. For example, someone who tries music, sport and painting may eventually find a hobby they truly enjoy.

× Yes when I was a child I had a little money to take part in new activities my parents encouraged me to do sports and music.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I had a little money to take part in new activities, and my parents encouraged me to do sports and music.

The original sentence contains two independent clauses joined without appropriate punctuation or a conjunction. Use a full stop after Yes and add a comma and the conjunction and before my parents encouraged. When introducing a dependent time clause such as When I was a child, place a comma after the clause.

× It will help them to find their hobby, to practice a lot of sports, to learn different things It to

✓ It will help them find their hobbies, practise different sports, and learn different things.

The ending It to is an incomplete fragment and does not form a grammatical clause. Remove it and keep the three actions in a parallel structure: find, practise, and learn. After help, the base verb without to is natural and grammatically correct. Use hobbies in the plural when referring to possible interests in general.