Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, I have lots of experience in my childhood, specially I have experience in farming because my father was a farmer and I've got several experience from my father on how to make the flowing, reading, watering and how to grow uh, uh, plant from the singers.
Giám khảo
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Thí sinh
Just nowadays, most of the people are doing what they can do. There's two kind of people. For one hand, people are doing the new thing to achieve their, uh, goals and activity and enjoy their lesser time activity and others have some people.
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: Answer the question directly in the first sentence, then describe one or two specific activities. Improve grammatical accuracy: use “when I was a child” instead of “in my childhood,” “especially” instead of “specially,” “a lot of experience” instead of “lots of experience” in this context, and “several experiences” instead of “several experience.” Use accurate farming vocabulary such as “ploughing,” “sowing seeds,” “watering crops,” and “growing plants.” Avoid repetition and unclear expressions, and keep the answer to no more than five sentences.
Ví dụ: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities when I was a child. Since my father was a farmer, he taught me how to plough the land, sow seeds, and water the crops. I really enjoyed learning these skills because I could see the plants gradually grow.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Điểm: 35.0Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion immediately instead of beginning with “Just nowadays.” Use a logical structure: state whether you agree, give one reason, and add a brief example or qualification. Correct the grammar in “There’s two kind of people” to “There are two kinds of people,” and avoid incomplete phrases such as “and others have some people.” Use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” and “however.” Also, use natural expressions like “try new activities,” “achieve their goals,” and “spare time” rather than “new thing” and “lesser time activity.”
Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and develop new skills. For example, someone who tries cooking, sports, or volunteering may find a new hobby or even a future career. However, they do not need to try everything; they should focus on activities that suit their goals and interests.
× Yes, I have lots of experience in my childhood, specially I have experience in farming because my father was a farmer and I've got several experience from my father on how to make the flowing, reading, watering and how to grow uh, uh, plant from the singers.
✓ Yes, I had lots of experience during my childhood. I had experience in farming because my father was a farmer, and I got several experiences from him.
The speaker is describing experiences that happened during childhood, so the simple past tense is more appropriate. Use had instead of have and got instead of have got in this past-time context.
× Yes, I have lots of experience in my childhood, specially I have experience in farming because my father was a farmer and I've got several experience from my father on how to make the flowing, reading, watering and how to grow uh, uh, plant from the singers.
✓ Yes, I had lots of experience during my childhood. I had experience in farming because my father was a farmer, and I got several experiences from him on how to grow plants from seeds.
Several must be followed by a plural countable noun, so experience should be experiences. Plant should be plants when referring to plants generally. Remember to use a plural noun after several and when speaking about things in general.
× Yes, I have lots of experience in my childhood, specially I have experience in farming because my father was a farmer and I've got several experience from my father on how to make the flowing, reading, watering and how to grow uh, uh, plant from the singers.
✓ Yes, I had lots of experience during my childhood. I had experience in farming because my father was a farmer, and I got several experiences from him.
During is more natural than in when referring to a period of time such as childhood. Use during my childhood to describe when the experience happened.
× Yes, I have lots of experience in my childhood, specially I have experience in farming because my father was a farmer and I've got several experience from my father on how to make the flowing, reading, watering and how to grow uh, uh, plant from the singers.
✓ Yes, I had lots of experience during my childhood. In particular, I had experience in farming because my father was a farmer, and I got several experiences from him.
Specially usually means in a special manner, while especially or in particular is used to emphasize one item or area. Here, in particular clearly introduces farming as the specific example.
× There's two kind of people.
✓ There are two kinds of people.
The noun phrase two kinds of people is plural, so the plural form are is required instead of is. Use there are before plural nouns and there is before singular nouns.
× There's two kind of people.
✓ There are two kinds of people.
The number two requires the plural form kinds, not the singular form kind. After numbers greater than one, use a plural countable noun.
× For one hand, people are doing the new thing to achieve their, uh, goals and activity and enjoy their lesser time activity and others have some people.
✓ On the one hand, people are trying new things to achieve their goals and enjoy their leisure-time activities, while others do other things.
The fixed expression is on the one hand, not for one hand. Use the complete expression on the one hand when presenting the first of two contrasting ideas.
× For one hand, people are doing the new thing to achieve their, uh, goals and activity and enjoy their lesser time activity and others have some people.
✓ On the one hand, people are trying new things to achieve their goals and enjoy their leisure-time activities, while others do other things.
When referring to activities or things in general, use plural nouns: things and activities. The plural forms make the meaning clearer and agree with the general statement.
× For one hand, people are doing the new thing to achieve their, uh, goals and activity and enjoy their lesser time activity and others have some people.
✓ On the one hand, people are trying new things to achieve their goals and enjoy their leisure-time activities, while others do other things.
Lesser time activity is not the appropriate adjective-noun combination. Leisure-time activities is the standard expression for activities done during free time. Learn common adjective-noun collocations as complete phrases.
× For one hand, people are doing the new thing to achieve their, uh, goals and activity and enjoy their lesser time activity and others have some people.
✓ On the one hand, people are trying new things to achieve their goals and enjoy their leisure-time activities, while others do other things.
The original sentence has an unclear structure, and the phrase others have some people does not express a complete logical idea. Use while to connect the two contrasting groups and make the second clause complete.