Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が不明確な部分があります。「When I had a child」は「When I was a child」、「his soccer gym」は文脈に合う「a soccer club」などに直しましょう。また、「prayed」は「played」の誤りです。最初に直接答え、その後に誰と、どこで、どのように始めたかを具体的に説明すると、より自然で効果的になります。

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. When I was a child, some of my friends invited me to join a soccer club. I decided to give it a try, and I soon started playing soccer regularly.

Gợi ý: 意見と理由が明確で、質問にも直接答えられています。ただし、「many as many things as they can do」は不自然なので、「as many different things as they can」または「as many new activities as possible」と言いましょう。また、「broaden their minds」だけで終わらせず、具体例や結果を1文加えると、内容と語彙の評価が上がります。

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. I think people should try as many different things as they can because new experiences can broaden their minds. For example, taking up a sport or learning a language can help them become more confident and open-minded.

× When I had a child, my friends told me to take part in his soccer gym.

✓ When I was a child, my friends told me to take part in a soccer program.

The phrase had a child means that someone became a parent or gave birth to a child. To describe your own childhood, use was a child. The phrase a soccer program is also more natural in this context.

× When I had a child, my friends told me to take part in his soccer gym.

✓ When I was a child, my friends told me to take part in a soccer program.

The pronoun his does not have a clear male antecedent in the sentence. Use an indefinite article and a suitable noun, such as a soccer program, when referring to an activity in general.

× I think people should try many as many things as they can do because trying many new things will generally broaden their minds.

✓ I think people should try as many different things as they can because trying many new things will generally broaden their minds.

Many as many is an incorrect combination of quantifiers. Use the fixed structure as many + plural countable noun + as possible or as they can. Also, can already functions as the modal verb for try, so do is unnecessary here.