Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Thí sinh
When I was a child, I had many cousins in different age ranges and it was a big opportunity to participate in different activities and learn from them for example different sports or different games.
Giám khảo
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Thí sinh
That would be great to try as many different things as you can because it lets you know yourself better find your talents and find your passion so you can pursue what you like in future.
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: Answer the question more directly by explaining how your cousins gave you opportunities to try new activities. Use a linking phrase such as “For example” before giving specific activities, and avoid the awkward expression “it was a big opportunity.” You could also improve grammar and naturalness by saying “cousins of different ages” and “learn from them.”
Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. I had many cousins of different ages, so I often had opportunities to try new activities with them. For example, we played different sports and board games, and I learned a lot by watching my older cousins.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion at the beginning, such as “Yes, I think people should try different things.” Improve sentence structure by adding “to” in “helps you to understand yourself better” and using linking words to separate the reasons. The phrases “find your talents” and “in future” would sound more natural as “discover your talents” and “in the future.”
Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. This helps them understand themselves better and discover their strengths and interests. As a result, they may find a passion that they can pursue in the future.
× When I was a child, I had many cousins in different age ranges and it was a big opportunity to participate in different activities and learn from them for example different sports or different games.
✓ When I was a child, I had many cousins of different ages, and spending time with them gave me a great opportunity to participate in different activities, such as sports and games, and learn from them.
The original sentence contains several ideas joined together without clear structure or punctuation. Using spending time with them gives the sentence a clear subject, and such as introduces examples more naturally. Avoid repeating different before every noun when it is not necessary.
× That would be great to try as many different things as you can because it lets you know yourself better find your talents and find your passion so you can pursue what you like in future.
✓ It would be great to try as many different things as you can because doing so helps you get to know yourself better, discover your talents, and find your passion, so you can pursue what you like in the future.
The phrase That would be great to try is structurally incorrect because an introductory dummy subject, it, is needed. The original sentence also places several verbs together without coordination. Commas and and make the list clear: get to know, discover, and find.
× That would be great to try as many different things as you can because it lets you know yourself better find your talents and find your passion so you can pursue what you like in future.
✓ It would be great to try as many different things as you can because doing so helps you get to know yourself better, discover your talents, and find your passion, so you can pursue what you like in the future.
The fixed expression is in the future, so the definite article the is required before future. Use in the future when referring to a later period of time.