Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答の主旨は伝わりますが、過去の経験について話しているため、"I'd like" や "is" ではなく、"I liked" や "was" などの過去形を使いましょう。また、"support me from the money and the time and the delivery" は不自然なので、"support me financially and by taking me there" のように表現できます。最初に直接答え、その後に具体例と結果を加え、文を最後まで完成させてください。例えば、どの活動に参加したか、母親がどのように支援したかを説明すると、より具体的で自然な回答になります。

Ví dụ: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. I often used the internet to find interesting summer camps, such as computer and sports camps. My mother supported me financially and took me to the venues, so I was able to try activities that I had never done before.

Gợi ý: 意見は明確ですが、"try everything new since they can" や "try the new sins" は文法的・語彙的に不自然です。"try as many new things as possible" や "trying new things can give people new ideas" を使いましょう。また、理由を一つか二つに整理し、"For example" や "As a result" などの linking words でつなぐと、より論理的になります。"science fiction" は文脈に合わないため、ここでは "new perspectives" や "useful skills" が適切です。

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. Trying new activities can give them fresh ideas and help them develop useful skills. For example, learning a new language or playing a sport can make people more confident and open-minded. As a result, they can continue improving themselves.

× Yes, when I was a child, I'd like to use computers to find new activities and to join them.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I liked using computers to find new activities and join them.

Because the student is describing a past experience, the present-related form would like is not appropriate here. Use the past-tense verb liked. After liked, using is also a natural verb pattern.

× And my mother is very glad to see me to join these activities

✓ My mother was very glad to see me join these activities.

The sentence describes the mother’s feelings during the student’s childhood, so is should be changed to the past tense was. After see, use the base verb join rather than to join in this structure.

× she will support me from the money and the time and the delivery

✓ She would support me with money, time, and transportation.

Since the main story is in the past, the future form will should change to the past form would when describing support that was expected or provided at that time.

× she will support me from the money and the time and the delivery

✓ She would support me with money, time, and transportation.

Use with to describe the resources used to provide support. From does not correctly express the meaning in this sentence.

× so I can join the camp

✓ so I could join a camp.

Use the indefinite article a when mentioning one camp that has not been identified previously. Also, could is suitable because the sentence is describing a past situation.

× so I can join the camp and

✓ So I could join a camp.

The original utterance ends with and, leaving the sentence incomplete. Remove the unnecessary conjunction or add another complete clause after it.

× Yes, I think people should try everything new since they can

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many new things as they can.

Use as many ... as they can when referring to a large number of countable things. Everything new does not fit the comparison structure in the question.

× since they can because try the new sins can bring the new ideas

✓ because trying new things can bring new ideas

Because correctly introduces the reason for the opinion. Since they can is unclear in this context. Also, the subject of the clause should be the gerund phrase trying new things.

× try the new sins can bring the new ideas and the new science fiction

✓ Trying new things can bring new ideas and new science fiction.

When an action functions as the subject of a sentence, use the -ing form. Therefore, try should become trying.

× can bring the new ideas and the new science fiction

✓ can bring new ideas and new science fiction.

The nouns are being used in a general sense, so the definite article the is unnecessary. Use no article for general plural or uncountable nouns.

× to for peoples

✓ to people

People is already the plural form of person. Do not add the plural ending -s to people.

× can bring the new ideas and the new science fiction to for peoples

✓ can bring new ideas and new science fiction to people.

Use to after bring to identify the people who receive something. The preposition for is unnecessary in this structure.

× and they need this to update themselves

✓ and they need these things to keep themselves updated.

This is singular, but it refers to multiple ideas or types of knowledge. Use these things for a plural reference. Keep themselves updated is also the natural expression for maintaining current knowledge.