Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Thí sinh
Yes I had because my parents always wanted to broaden my horizons so they took me to many sections.
Giám khảo
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you don't know in advance what will you enjoy and sometimes unexpected experience could be changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: Ответ соответствует вопросу и содержит причину, но есть несколько проблем с естественностью и точностью слов. Вместо “Yes, I had” лучше сказать “Yes, I did” или “Yes, I had plenty of opportunities”. Слово “sections” здесь неверно; используйте “activities”, “classes” или названия конкретных занятий. Добавьте один конкретный пример и свяжите идеи с помощью “so” или “for example”.
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. My parents wanted to broaden my horizons, so they encouraged me to try different activities, such as swimming and drawing. For example, I attended a painting class for several months, and I really enjoyed it.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Điểm: 78.0Gợi ý: Ответ хорошо выражает мнение, объясняет причину и приводит личный пример, но предложение слишком длинное и содержит неестественные конструкции. После “what” нужен прямой порядок слов: “what you will enjoy”. Вместо “unexpected experience could be changing” лучше сказать “an unexpected experience can be life-changing”. Разделите ответ на 3–4 коротких предложения и используйте связку “for example” перед личным опытом.
Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. You never know what you will enjoy until you give it a try, and an unexpected experience can sometimes be life-changing. For example, I started volunteering last year and discovered that I really enjoy helping other people.
× Yes I had because my parents always wanted to broaden my horizons so they took me to many sections.
✓ Yes, I did, because my parents always wanted to broaden my horizons, so they took me to many sections.
The question begins with the auxiliary verb did: Did you have...? Therefore, the short answer should use did, not had. Use did to avoid repeating the main verb have in a short answer.
× Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you don't know in advance what will you enjoy and sometimes unexpected experience could be changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.
✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you do not know in advance what you will enjoy, and sometimes an unexpected experience could be life-changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.
In an indirect question after you do not know, the word order must be subject + verb: what you will enjoy, not what will you enjoy. In indirect questions, do not use question word order.
× Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you don't know in advance what will you enjoy and sometimes unexpected experience could be changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.
✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you do not know in advance what you will enjoy, and sometimes an unexpected experience could be life-changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.
Unexpected experience is a singular countable noun phrase, so it needs an article. Use an because unexpected begins with a vowel sound: an unexpected experience.
× Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you don't know in advance what will you enjoy and sometimes unexpected experience could be changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.
✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because you do not know in advance what you will enjoy, and sometimes an unexpected experience could be life-changing because I tried volunteering last year and I really enjoyed it.
Changing does not express the intended meaning here. The adjective life-changing means having a strong or important effect on someone's life. Use life-changing to describe an experience that can significantly affect you.