Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Thí sinh
When I was young, I always played ping pong and basketballs in my father's school And with so many other child.
Giám khảo
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think so. The key of life is experience. So we should try everything we can to expand our boundary.
Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 回答基本切题,但主要问题是语法、搭配和细节不足。应将“basketballs”改为不可数或运动名称“basketball”,将“other child”改为复数“other children”,并把句子分开,避免使用大写的“And”连接。建议先直接回答“有”,然后说明活动地点、陪伴的人以及这些活动带来的感受。例如,可以补充你为什么喜欢这些活动,或说明它们帮助你交到了朋友。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. I often played table tennis and basketball at my father’s school with many other children. I especially enjoyed playing team sports because they helped me make friends and stay active.
Should people try as many different things as they can?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答观点明确,结构也比较清楚,但有几处不自然的表达。“The key of life is experience”应改为“The key to life is gaining experience”或“Life is all about gaining experience”;“expand our boundary”应改为“broaden our horizons”或“step outside our comfort zone”。此外,“try everything”过于绝对,可以改为“try as many meaningful things as possible”,并加入一个具体例子,使理由更加有说服力。
Ví dụ: Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible. The key to a fulfilling life is gaining new experiences, because they help us broaden our horizons and discover our strengths. For example, trying a new sport or learning a foreign language can make us more confident and open-minded.
× When I was young, I always played ping pong and basketballs in my father's school And with so many other child.
✓ When I was young, I always played ping pong and basketball at my father's school with many other children.
“Basketball”作为球类运动名称时通常使用单数形式,不能写成“basketballs”。“Child”的复数形式是不规则变化“children”,所以“many other child”应改为“many other children”。同时,删除句中不必要的大写“And”,并将“with many other children”放在主句后面,使句子结构更自然。
× The key of life is experience.
✓ The key to life is experience.
表示“……的关键”时,固定搭配是“the key to”,而不是“the key of”。建议记忆搭配“the key to something”,例如“The key to success is hard work.”