Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변의 핵심은 전달되지만, 반복적인 말더듬과 자기 수정이 많아 자연스럽지 않습니다. 또한 질문은 어린 시절 새로운 활동에 참여할 기회가 있었는지를 묻고 있으므로, “기억이 잘 나지 않는다”는 이유보다 먼저 직접적으로 “No” 또는 “Yes”라고 답해야 합니다. “because it's been a very long time ago”는 부자연스러우므로 “because it was a long time ago” 또는 “because I was quite young”이라고 표현하세요. 2~3문장으로 답하면서, 참여하지 못한 구체적인 이유나 기억나는 활동을 하나 덧붙이면 더 효과적입니다.

Ví dụ: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities as a child. My parents were quite busy, and I usually spent my free time studying or playing at home. Since it was a long time ago, I don’t remember the details very clearly.

Gợi ý: 의견을 제시하려고 했지만 문장이 끝나지 않았고, “everyone didn't”와 “everyone don't know”는 문법적으로 잘못되었습니다. 일반적인 사실을 말할 때는 “not everyone knows what they want” 또는 “people do not always know what they like”라고 하세요. 먼저 “Yes, I think people should try different things”처럼 주제문을 제시한 뒤, “because”로 이유를 연결하고, 새로운 경험이 자신에게 맞는 것을 발견하는 데 도움이 된다는 구체적인 결과나 예를 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 반복을 줄이고 3문장 정도로 완결된 답변을 만드는 것이 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. Not everyone knows what they really enjoys, so trying new activities can help them discover their interests and strengths. For example, someone might take a cooking class and realize that they would like to work in the food industry.

× No, I, I, I think I didn't have, have, didn't have time, didn't, didn't take part in new activities as a child because it's been a very long time ago. I can't remember.

✓ No, I think I didn't have time and didn't take part in new activities as a child because it was a very long time ago. I can't remember.

The phrase 'a very long time ago' refers to a finished time in the past, so the past tense 'was' is required instead of 'it's been.' Use 'was' with a completed past time expression such as 'ago.'

× No, I, I, I think I didn't have, have, didn't have time, didn't, didn't take part in new activities as a child because it's been a very long time ago. I can't remember.

✓ No, I think I didn't have time and didn't take part in new activities as a child because it was a very long time ago. I can't remember.

Two verb phrases, 'didn't have time' and 'didn't take part,' describe related actions by the same subject. They should be connected with the conjunction 'and' rather than being placed next to each other without a conjunction.

× Umm, yes, but I, I think, uh, people try as many things as they can because, uh, I think everyone didn't every, everyone don't know what they, uh, want or what they like, what they like exactly, but if they have a lot.

✓ Yes, but I think people should try as many different things as they can because not everyone knows exactly what they want or like.

The question asks whether people should make an effort to try different activities. Therefore, the modal verb 'should' is needed before 'try' to express advice or recommendation.

× Umm, yes, but I, I think, uh, people try as many things as they can because, uh, I think everyone didn't every, everyone don't know what they, uh, want or what they like, what they like exactly, but if they have a lot.

✓ Yes, but I think people should try as many different things as they can because not everyone knows exactly what they want or like.

'Everyone' is grammatically singular, so the present-tense verb must be 'knows,' not 'know' or 'don't know.' The negative expression 'not everyone knows' is natural when stating that some people are uncertain about their preferences.

× Umm, yes, but I, I think, uh, people try as many things as they can because, uh, I think everyone didn't every, everyone don't know what they, uh, want or what they like, what they like exactly, but if they have a lot.

✓ Yes, but I think people should try as many different things as they can because not everyone knows exactly what they want or like. If they try many things, they may discover what they enjoy.

The ending 'but if they have a lot' is an incomplete and unclear subordinate clause. A sentence beginning with 'if' needs a complete main clause, so it should be completed with a meaningful result, such as 'they may discover what they enjoy.'