Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Die Antwort ist direkt und enthält konkrete Beispiele, aber „took parts“ muss „took part“ heißen. Außerdem ist „or or“ eine Wiederholung, und „swimming contests“ klingt hier weniger natürlich als „swimming“ oder „swimming competitions“. Verwende eine klarere Aufzählung und füge, wenn möglich, ein kurzes persönliches Detail oder einen Grund hinzu, um die Antwort stärker zu entwickeln.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. I played basketball and football, and I also took swimming lessons. I enjoyed swimming the most because it helped me stay fit and make new friends.

Gợi ý: Die Antwort enthält eine klare Meinung und einen Grund, aber mehrere Ausdrücke sind unnatürlich oder grammatisch falsch. Sage „broaden people’s minds“ statt „enlighten people’s minds“, „break up their routine“ statt „change their routine“ und „help them overcome depression“ statt „make them hard of depression“. Vermeide außerdem die wiederholte Struktur „can ... can ... can“ und ergänze ein konkretes Beispiel oder Ergebnis.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because it can broaden their minds and break up their routine. For example, learning a new sport or taking up a creative hobby can help people discover their interests. It may also improve their mood and help them deal with stress.

× Yes, I took parts in activities such as basketball, football or swimming contests when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I took part in activities such as basketball, football, or swimming contests when I was a child.

The fixed expression is take part in, not take parts in. Part is singular in this expression. Use take part in when you mean participate in an activity.

× Yes, since trying different things may enlighten people's minds or can change their routine and can make them hard of depression.

✓ Yes, since trying different things may enlighten people's minds, change their routines, and help them deal with depression.

The sentence uses may, can, and can inconsistently in one coordinated structure. After may, use parallel base-form verbs: enlighten, change, and help. Avoid repeating different modal verbs when the same modal meaning applies to all the verbs.

× Yes, since trying different things may enlighten people's minds or can change their routine and can make them hard of depression.

✓ Yes, since trying different things may enlighten people's minds, change their routines, and help them stay free from depression.

Hard of depression is not a correct English expression. Use a natural prepositional expression such as free from depression, or say help them deal with depression. Learn common word combinations together with their prepositions.