Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Answer the question directly and avoid repetition, such as repeating “grade” and “activities.” Use the natural phrase “for example,” not “for an example.” Improve grammatical accuracy by saying “when I was in third grade, I attended a seminar on recycling paper” instead of using several clauses without clear connections. Use linking words such as “where” and “during which” to organize the details, and explain briefly what you learned or did in the activity.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, when I was in third grade, I attended a seminar on recycling paper. We learned how to sort paper and reuse it instead of throwing it away. It was interesting because it showed me how small actions can help protect the environment.

Gợi ý: Give a clear opinion first, then provide one or two well-organized reasons and examples. Avoid repeating “I believe” and “a lot of things,” and replace unnatural phrases such as “scrolling phone,” “all the day,” and “suffering through apps” with “scrolling on your phone all day” and “spending too much time on social media.” The answer ends abruptly, so complete your final sentence. Use a linking word such as “Moreover” or “For instance” to connect your ideas, and keep the response to about three or four focused sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try different activities because there is always something new to learn. For instance, they could take up gardening, learn a musical instrument, or try an adventure sport. These activities can help people discover their interests and become more confident. They are also a healthier alternative to spending all day scrolling on their phones.

× For an example when I was in third grade grade I used to learn how we can recycle paper it was a seminar in which we were told the steps which can be used to recycle paper.

✓ For example, when I was in third grade, I used to learn how to recycle paper. It was a seminar in which we were told the steps that could be used to recycle paper.

The fixed expression is for example, not for an example. The article a is not used before example in this expression. Also, commas are needed to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause.

× For an example when I was in third grade grade I used to learn how we can recycle paper it was a seminar in which we were told the steps which can be used to recycle paper.

✓ For example, when I was in third grade, I learned how to recycle paper. It was a seminar in which we were told the steps that could be used to recycle paper.

The student is describing a particular seminar in the past, so learned is more appropriate than used to learn. Used to describes a repeated or habitual past activity, whereas learned refers to a specific past event. Could is also suitable for reported information about what was possible at that time.

× For an example when I was in third grade grade I used to learn how we can recycle paper it was a seminar in which we were told the steps which can be used to recycle paper.

✓ For example, when I was in third grade, I learned how to recycle paper. It was a seminar in which we were told the steps that could be used to recycle paper.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined without proper punctuation, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into two sentences, and use commas around the introductory when-clause.

× I believe that people should try a lot of things whether it is adventure sports or gardening or anything because I strongly believe that instead of scrolling phone all the day or suffering through apps or using mobile this is really bad.

✓ I believe that people should try many things, whether they are adventure sports, gardening, or something else, because I strongly believe that scrolling on a phone all day, spending too much time on apps, and using a mobile phone excessively are bad.

The correct preposition is scrolling on a phone, not scrolling phone. The phrase scrolling on a phone describes the activity of using the phone while scrolling.

× I believe that people should try a lot of things whether it is adventure sports or gardening or anything because I strongly believe that instead of scrolling phone all the day or suffering through apps or using mobile this is really bad.

✓ I believe that people should try many things, whether they are adventure sports, gardening, or something else, because I strongly believe that scrolling on a phone all day, spending too much time on apps, and using a mobile phone excessively are bad.

The pronoun it does not agree with the plural noun adventure sports. Use they with the plural subject. Also, this is unclear because it does not clearly refer to one specific noun. Repeating the activities as the subject makes the meaning clearer.

× I believe that people should try a lot of things whether it is adventure sports or gardening or anything because I strongly believe that instead of scrolling phone all the day or suffering through apps or using mobile this is really bad.

✓ I believe that people should try many things, whether they are adventure sports, gardening, or something else, because I strongly believe that scrolling on a phone all day, spending too much time on apps, and using a mobile phone excessively are bad.

The subject is a list of three activities: scrolling, spending, and using. A compound subject takes the plural verb are, not is. The plural form also makes the sentence grammatically consistent.

× I believe that people should try a lot of things whether it is adventure sports or gardening or anything because I strongly believe that instead of scrolling phone all the day or suffering through apps or using mobile this is really bad.

✓ I believe that people should try many things, whether they are adventure sports, gardening, or something else, because I strongly believe that scrolling on a phone all day, spending too much time on apps, and using a mobile phone excessively are bad.

Use a before the singular countable noun phone in a mobile phone. However, no article is needed in the expression all day. The phrase all the day is not natural in this context.

× That's why I believe

✓ That's why I believe people should try different activities and spend less time on their phones.

That's why I believe is an incomplete sentence because the verb believe needs a following idea or clause in this context. Add the subject and the information that follows believe to make a complete sentence.