Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then briefly describe two or three activities and explain where or when you did them. Avoid listing too many activities, repetition, fillers such as “uh,” and unfinished sentences. Use accurate past-tense forms: say “Some of them were basketball and volleyball” and “we used to play there,” rather than switching between present and past tenses.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child. I played basketball and volleyball at a sports centre near my home, and I also enjoyed riding my bicycle with my friends. These activities were a great way to stay active and spend time outdoors.

Gợi ý: Give a complete, well-organised response with a clear opinion and two specific benefits. Replace unnatural expressions such as “maintain your physical body and strongness” with “stay physically healthy” or “improve physical fitness.” Use linking words such as “firstly,” “also,” and “for example,” and avoid fillers, repetition, and the unfinished ending. Although the question refers to people in general, avoid limiting your answer to “as a kid.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities, although they do not need to do everything. Firstly, new experiences help people discover their interests and strengths. They can also build confidence and improve their physical or mental health; for example, joining a sports club may help someone become fitter and make new friends.

× Yes, I gladly did when I was a child, I used to do a lot of activities.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I used to do a lot of activities.

The original contains two independent clauses joined only by a comma, which creates a comma splice. Separate the clauses with a period, or join them with a suitable conjunction.

× Some of them are basketball, volleyball, riding the bicycle or even horse riding.

✓ Some of them were basketball, volleyball, cycling, and even horse riding.

The answer describes activities you did in the past, so the past form were is needed instead of are. Keep the verb tense consistent with the past-time expression when I was a child.

× We had the this place that we usually go to.

✓ We had this place that we usually went to.

The cannot be used directly before this. Use either this place or the place, but not the this place.

× We had this place that we usually go to.

✓ We had this place that we usually went to.

The activity happened during your childhood, so go should be changed to its past form went. Maintain past tense throughout a story about a past period.

× We play a lot in it.

✓ We played a lot there.

Because you are describing childhood activities, play should be in the past tense: played. There is also no need to repeat the place with in it; there is more natural here, but the required grammar correction is the past tense.

× And we.

✓ And we played there together.

And we is an incomplete clause because it does not contain a complete verb phrase. Add a verb and, if necessary, an object or complement to complete the thought.

× Yes, of course trying new things as a kid would help, you know, what are you good at and bad at and it helps you, uh, build confidence and maintain your physical, uh, uh, body and strongness.

✓ Yes, of course. Trying new things as a child would help you know what you are good at and bad at, and it would help you build confidence and maintain your physical health and strength.

The original contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation or structure. Use what you are good at instead of the direct-question order what are you good at in an embedded clause. Separate the introductory response and coordinate the ideas clearly.

× Trying new things as a kid would help you know what you are good at and bad at, and it helps you build confidence.

✓ Trying new things as a child would help you know what you are good at and bad at, and it would help you build confidence.

The sentence begins with the modal would help, so the second coordinated idea should use would help as well for parallel structure. After a modal verb such as would, use the base form of the verb.

× Maintain your physical body and strongness.

✓ Maintain your physical health and strength.

Strongness is not the appropriate noun in this context. Use the established noun strength. Physical health is also more accurate and natural than physical body when discussing the benefits of activities.

× And I really think that it's not only.

✓ And I really think that it is not only beneficial but also enjoyable.

Not only introduces an incomplete contrast and cannot stand alone at the end of the sentence. Complete the paired structure with but also and add a suitable adjective or phrase.