Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise, use correct tense and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use past tense), and give one specific brief detail explaining why. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly.

Ví dụ: No, I didn't have many opportunities to try new activities as a child because my family had limited money. As a result, I mostly stayed at home and focused on schoolwork rather than joining clubs or classes.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid repetition and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'skills', 'perspectives'). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, people should try many different things because it helps them develop new skills and broadens their perspective. For example, learning a musical instrument or a new sport can improve discipline and confidence, which benefits both work and personal life.

× No, unfortunately as a child I don't have any opportunities, uh, because uh, uh, whenever I was child, I have low expenses and umm, uh, low budgets to take a part of new activities.

✓ No, unfortunately as a child I didn't have any opportunities because whenever I was a child, I had low income and a small budget to take part in new activities.

Tense inconsistency and article/word choice errors: The student mixes present tense ('don't have') with past context ('as a child' / 'whenever I was a child'). Use simple past ('didn't have', 'had') for past situations. Also use 'a child' with the article and say 'had low income' or 'a small budget' rather than 'low expenses' and 'low budgets'. Use 'take part in' (correct preposition) not 'take a part of'.

× So I did not do any activities as a child.

✓ So I did not do any activities when I was a child.

Missing time phrase clarity: The original is grammatically acceptable but awkward; adding 'when I was a child' makes the time reference explicit and consistent with the past tense used. This improves clarity and naturalness.

× Yes, people, uh, should try many different things, uh, which they can because in this way they enhance their abilities and their minds and, uh, better life.

✓ Yes, people should try many different things because this helps them develop their abilities, broaden their minds, and have a better life.

Awkward relative clause and parallelism: 'which they can' is unnecessary and awkward. Use 'should' correctly and follow with a clear result clause. Maintain parallel structure: 'develop their abilities, broaden their minds, and have a better life.' Also replace 'enhance' with 'develop' for collocation with 'abilities' and use 'have a better life' for clarity.

× So, uh, people should also try a different things and make the life different from other.

✓ So people should also try different things and make their lives different from others'.

Article and noun-number agreement errors: 'a different things' is incorrect; 'different things' (no article) is correct. 'the life' should be 'their lives' to match plural 'people'. 'Different from other' should be 'different from others' (comparative object). Also possessive 'others'' clarifies comparison. Ensuring plural agreement and correct article use fixes the sentence.