Opportunities— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and sentence structure, be more concise and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement, and limit to at most five sentences. Add one specific detail about an experience or result to enrich the answer.

Ví dụ: Yes. My parents encouraged me to try new activities, so I attended ballet and painting classes as extracurriculars. For example, during painting lessons I learned shading techniques and discovered I enjoyed drawing landscapes. As a result, I pursued more art projects and joined a school art club.

Gợi ý: Complete the final thought and add a linking word for coherence. Provide a concise reason and a specific example or result. Keep it within five sentences and avoid trailing off.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think people should try many different things because new experiences build skills and broaden perspectives. For instance, joining a sports team helped me become more disciplined and meet people from different backgrounds. Therefore, trying new activities can improve both your abilities and social life.

× Yes, I had my parent encouraged me to attend ballet and painting class as extracurricular experiences.

✓ Yes, my parents encouraged me to attend ballet and painting classes as extracurricular activities.

The original sentence misuses the structure 'I had my parent encouraged me' which is ungrammatical and mixes causative 'have' with a direct active clause. Also 'parent' should be plural 'parents' if referring to both; if only one parent, use 'my parent encouraged me' but more commonly 'my parents encouraged me.' 'Class' should be plural 'classes' because two activities are listed, and 'experiences' is better as 'activities.' The suggestion: use a simple past active verb 'encouraged' with the correct subject 'my parents' and plural nouns where appropriate.

× When I attended painting lesson, I discovered my talent and interest in paint drawing.

✓ When I attended painting lessons, I discovered my talent and interest in painting/drawing.

'Painting lesson' should be plural 'painting lessons' to match general experience. 'Paint drawing' is nonstandard; use 'painting' or 'drawing.' The adjective 'painting' functions as a noun here. Use consistent noun form: 'interest in painting' or 'interest in drawing.' Also ensure article: 'When I attended painting lessons' is natural for repeated classes.

× Yes, I believe so. If people try a variety of experiences, they can learn new skills and gradually shape their identity.

✓ Yes, I believe so. If people try a variety of experiences, they can learn new skills and gradually shape their identities.

The sentence is mostly correct but uses singular 'identity' while referring to 'people' plural; plural 'identities' is more consistent. This is a subject-number agreement issue at the noun level; change to 'identities' to match plural subject.

× Additionally, they can make new friends, which.

✓ Additionally, they can make new friends, which can broaden their social circle.

The original fragment 'which.' is incomplete and leaves the relative clause unfinished. You must complete the clause to explain the effect. A correct completion: 'which can broaden their social circle' or 'which helps them expand their social network.' Ensure the relative pronoun 'which' refers to the whole preceding clause and is followed by a verb phrase to form a full sentence.